Help please!!!

[Luna_Wolf72]

I visited here a few weeks ago (well almost a month ago) with an idea for a story concerning a Domme who wants to turn her straight boi bi. I had lots of great suggestions and one particular person who offered to read it over and make suggestions as to how I could make it read clearer.

Well now I am at that all important first homosexual scene between 2 of my characters and i just can not DO it!!! It's driving me nuts. I know what I want to say as my story is jumping between Her thoughts and his...but i do not have the words to describe it...no words at all.

I have a friend who is bi who has been reading it so far. He loves it but can offer me no help on the mechanics of writing that scene. And since I have started the story on Microsoft doc. I have no idea how to let anyone else read it who might possibly be able to give me hand.

SOOOO...

My question becomes..anyone want to take a gander at it? Maybe tell me where I should go??

Pssst destinie...I am begging here!!!

Thanks everybody.

Pet

(if ya'll would like to see it please PM me with an e-mail addy so that I can send it along)

 

[A7inchPhildo]

apet4you,

Sounds interesting!

I would like to have a peek you can PM it if you like.

You may consider asking for some additional help in the Story ideas forum. That in it self will probably get you some more response.

 

[Luna_Wolf72]

I did as you asked...sent it to you in a PM...

please let me know what you think...

I am also gonna take this particular thought to the Stroy idea forum...

Thanks

 

[Boxlicker101]

If you want a description on his first anal intercourse, you can refer to Chapter 5 of Karen's Birthday. I go into a lot of detail there because it is Karen's first time too. I do the same in some other stories but that one is probably the most detail.

 

[Luna_Wolf72]

If you want a description on his first anal intercourse, you can refer to Chapter 5 of Karen's Birthday. I go into a lot of detail there because it is Karen's first time too. I do the same in some other stories but that one is probably the most detail.

Actually, i have been going through the anal section to get ideas..though my problem is not one of mechanics..it's more of thoughts and emotions.

I will check it out though..so thank you.

pet

 

[Boxlicker101]

Actually, i have been going through the anal section to get ideas..though my problem is not one of mechanics..it's more of thoughts and emotions.

I will check it out though..so thank you.

pet

The story that I mentioned is actually in novellas. I do have some in the anal section also, though.

 

[destinie21]

well I do like a girl that begs

 

[snooper]

My question becomes..anyone want to take a gander at it? Maybe tell me where I should go?? ...

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