Hello new to the lit

[amplyyours]

Hey I am new to the lit and wanted feedback on my some of the stuff I posted. If you could be so gracious as to take a look and let me know what you think it will be most appreciated. And I have some questions like how does the voting work and what is all of the voting for? And who rates the stories? Just basic question like that and I want to thank you again for any time that is given to me.

Amplyyours

 

[PennLady]

Hey I am new to the lit and wanted feedback on my some of the stuff I posted. If you could be so gracious as to take a look and let me know what you think it will be most appreciated. And I have some questions like how does the voting work and what is all of the voting for? And who rates the stories? Just basic question like that and I want to thank you again for any time that is given to me.

Amplyyours

Hi Amply.

Welcome to Lit and the forums.

Here are some tips, and don't forget to check the FAQs for more info.

First, if you'd like feedback, you should go to the "Story Feedback" area, make your post and include a link to your submission list, or to the specific submission. Adding what category it's in would help, tool; people don't like to be surprised a lot of times.

I'm sure others can answer the voting question better (hello, Darkniciad!) but generally -- readers can vote, or not, on a story. The rating is the average of the votes, and the votes are periodically "swept" to get rid of an anomalies or peculiarities, so you may see your score change slightly from time to time. But no one person or group "rates" the stories -- this is not a graded class, or a peer review forum.

I advise right off the bat that you do not get too wrapped up in views, votes and comments. You may get thousands of "views," but a tiny percentage -- like 1%, maybe -- will vote, and even fewer will leave comments. Do not take it personally, and don't let it keep you up nights. If you want to write, then just write.

Best of luck!

 

[sr71plt]

I advise right off the bat that you do not get too wrapped up in views, votes and comments. You may get thousands of "views," but a tiny percentage -- like 1%, maybe -- will vote, and even fewer will leave comments. Do not take it personally, and don't let it keep you up nights. If you want to write, then just write.

And be aware that no one (that I know of) has identified another erotica story sites with as many active readers as this one.

 

[El Folo]

Also, link us to stuff you wrote.

 

[PacoFear]

Also, link us to stuff you wrote.

Amply,

Folo is right. We're all lazy bastards so the etiquette for feedback request posts like yours is to provide a link. Since you're a newbie, I'll throw you a li'l help. Here's your link: Amplyyours' Stories

Oof, that took me a whole 0.82 seconds to type "Amplyyours" and "Literotica" into Google, then another 0.61 seconds to cut 'n paste it. I'm going to go to lie down.

In the meantime, welcome to our nifty little corner of the smut world.

-PF

 

[amplyyours]

oh thanks

now i had no idea how to post a link i was trying to figure it out. oh btw i am new to message boards too. i really appreciate it

 

[PennLady]

now i had no idea how to post a link i was trying to figure it out. oh btw i am new to message boards too. i really appreciate it

The easy way to put a link up is to just copy and paste it. If you'd like to have text instead of the link, you can put it between "url" tags:

<url=address>text</url>

But use [ and ] instead of < and >.

 

[El Folo]

Also, give me money. All of it.

 

[amplyyours]

Sorry

please forgive kind sir
for i am just a lowly poet
who fortune
will not turn her head
in my direction
until my dust
blows in the wind
and all that remains
a few scribbles
that are words
viewed thru eyes
spoken
on tongues
pushing dimension
of minds
in a era
not yet thought of

 

[El Folo]

Alright, that was pretty good, so give me more of that.

Plus interest! Srsly, don't make me gather a ragtag bunch of highwaymen who are easily intimidated by articulate smug archers who wear a lot of green! 'Cause Azathoth take me I will!

 

[amplyyours]

Well that is why I am here. This site was recommended to me, I was told that the writers here are pretty good. And I have to say they were wrong on all counts, there are some great writers and great stuff on here. So I have come to work and work and work, so that people will come and criticize and praise. Most of all I came here to break out of my shell that I have been hiding my writing. so now i have earned the right for you to give your opinion on what I have posted lol

 

[El Folo]

Fuck yeah. Grab the golden ring, beat the fat evil guy. Complete the stage that is your life!

 

[estragon]

Amply, welcome aboard! It's quite a ride, but there's nothing like it.

 

[CarlusMagnus]

Amply,

Folo is right. We're all lazy bastards so the etiquette for feedback request posts like yours is to provide a link. Since you're a newbie, I'll throw you a li'l help. Here's your link: Amplyyours' Stories

Oof, that took me a whole 0.82 seconds to type "Amplyyours" and "Literotica" into Google, then another 0.61 seconds to cut 'n paste it. I'm going to go to lie down.

In the meantime, welcome to our nifty little corner of the smut world.

-PF

Get your ass up from wherever you laid it down; we need to do a little work on it. :caning:

You fucked up the URL.

Shoulda been This one--not that one.

-----

By the way, Amply, PF's one of my favorite authors.

 

[PacoFear]

Oi. Here's the lesson: don't drink and post.

Thanks for the save, Carlus, and the endorsement. It's nice to have some "aww shucks" with my morning coffee.

 

[elfin_odalisque]

Amply, congrats and welcome. We froth a bit here but a quick stroke calms us down!

As a sucker for line break poetry I'm probably not the most neutral to review your poems, but I really enjoyed them. In my opinion, 'The Awakening' was the best. Because they are emotional and passionate, do you ever think of using the enjambement technique where the succeeding line changes the sense of the preceding line? Not good but;

i can
't hate him​

I felt torn reading Sinsations as I felt the emotion but bridled at the second person and lack of dialogue. Finally I twigged that if you had replaced 'you' with ''he' . For example;

You say, "Oh" as you take all of me.

Perhaps, " As he was taking me I hear him cry 'Oh!'"

If you write in first person, as you do very well, (sr - stick your head up your behind) you need to keep the perspective which doesn't work with 'you'. You also stray into 'reading the mind' of 'you', which doesn't work.

Given a full first person experience - with the same mindset - I think this story would be riding much higher. You clearly write from a female gender (here) so there is no prob using the masculine pronoun - and would probably increase your scores.

Please write more - stories as well - you have a talent. Just a couple of picky points:

The plural of pelvis is strictly 'pelves' but I'd use 'pelvises' and 'my body is like a wet noodle' dampens sexual tension for me.

 

[elfin_odalisque]

Just a bump to push scouries down a notch.

 

[amplyyours]

Thank you elfin for all of the advice. No I have not tried the techinque but I will try to incorporate it into my style in the future. And thank you for the compliments and yes I will continue to write and continue to post.