Hello All! Virgin Poster and Writter

[daciasdesire]

Hello Everyone.

I thought i would use this forum to introduce myself. Im Dacia a newish reader of Chyoo and have posted my first story after a week of waiting. Im super stoked about it and i think it is going along nicely. My view total is slowly rising. The story is The Choices We Make. Heres the link

http://www.chyoo.com/dx/?dx=c&story_id=780

I look forward to you all reading it and any reply posts this may recieve.

Thanks So Much

Dacia

 

[Guest]

I liked your story, especially the threads about going to the dance. I'd like to find out about Kat and Rebecca and where it is goin to lead. My only critisism, throughout various threads, is that occasionally you use of words/English lets you down. If you could brush this up it would make the reading easier and the story flow more smoothly.
Good wirting. keep it up.

 

[daciasdesire]

Thanks very much for the feedback Gorgeousgirl.

You will be happy to hear that my very first Chyoo contributor Goldfinger has added a thread to the passages on Katherine and Rebecca. Any criticisms are always appreciated and will help me to become a better writer. If you could help me by highlighting were my English suffers ill see how I can change this in the future. I use the Australian form of English which maybe a little different from the American in spelling alone. My spelling is at time terrible anyway I admit that.

On a side note one of my hopes for the story was to have developed characters with a sense of personality before everyone starts jumping in bed together. Thanks again to Goldfinger for introducing us to Carla, Katherine’s friend.

Thank you

Dacia

 

[daciasdesire]

Hello Everyone.

Just a quick update on my little story. Im trying to flesh out the choices as where to go in the start of the story. Ive added some more material to the Korn concert side which has been under done so far. As i added an extra thread to follow the lead set by Goldfinger.

I just had a thought. I think ill add a that thing which tell people who charcters are in plays. This is the list so far:

You the reader. An eighteen year old guy in school
Your sister. As yet unnamed or age.
Rebecca. Your next door nieghbour who is perhaps keeping something from you.
Katherine. A good looking girl from class and perhaps date.
Carla. Katherine's friend. Not much known otherwise.
Trish. One of your sisters cute friends.
Attractive Girl at concert. Yet to be explored.
Dave. Your friend from the football team. Left message on you answering machine.
Your friend(2). Unnamed buyer of ticket.

Im pretty sure thats all. I think ill introduce further characters in later posts and perhaps redo this bit a bit better when charcters devolp more on there personality.

Thanks all. Keep reading and if you like writting.

Dacia

 

[daciasdesire]

Thanks for the posts

I thought I would take this opportunity to thank GorgeousGirl for adding not one but two wonderful threads to my story The Choices We Make. GorgeousGirl has continued the story and its characters masterfully. With these additions I now have a deepest thread of 7 pages and a grand total of 11 threads. (I don’t know if this is a lot but I’m proud none the less.)

It’s also my aim to flesh out the story around the beginning. I had done some but I have been far too lazy plus I'm flat out with study.

So once again, thanks GorgeousGirl. With writing like yours feel free to submit anytime

Cheers
Dacia

P.s. Also, if anyone knows, how do some writers add a post with the name of their story being a link to story itself? I’d love to do it but have no idea how. Any help greatly appreciated

 

[daciasdesire]

Heating Up

Hello everyone.

Ive added a new thread over on the Korn concert side. Things are starting to heat up between the main character and his sisiter's friend Trish. Could things get steamy between the two of them. I hope one of you people will decide for me.

Anyway gotta run, writting to do.

Seeya

Dacia

 

[daciasdesire]

On fire

Four threads added in two days. Im on fire. I've tried to add bit on a number of different braches to flesh it out. All 3 deep threads are done and ill work on the ones 4 deep now, adding to ones deeper as i think they need it.

Oh and we've had are first recorded case of nudity as well.

Heres the link again

http://www.chyoo.com/dx/?dx=c&story_id=780

Cheers

Dacia

 

[niceguy2002tim]

HELP - I need somebody!

Hello,
I am sending this message as a call for help. Let me explain... I have a story on Chyoo called A College girl to be... and so far there are about 35 threads of my own and about that many from other writters. I have been away from the Chyoo site and the net for almost 2 weeks due to modem problems. While, I finally have access again and I was a bit disapointed to come back to only one new thread.

I have a promise and I have always lived up to it. My promise is for everybody who writes a thread to my story, I will write one to thiers. And the more they write, the more I write. I have almost 20 threads which I have contributed to other peoples stories and I enjoy helping them out.

Dacia, I recieved your thread and it was great! I approved it and it is now on my story. Also, I wrote a thread for your story and it is waiting for you. I appologize for the long delay before I could accept your thread. Hopefully it won't happen again.

Once again, I need new contributions to Keep my story alive... help me keep Sarah in school. Remember to stay in school! =)

thanks,
TIM (niceguy2002tim)

A COLLEGE GIRL TO BE...

 

[niceguy2002tim]

HELP - I need somebody!

Hello,
I am sending this message as a call for help. Let me explain... I have a story on Chyoo called A College girl to be... and so far there are about 35 threads of my own and about that many from other writters. I have been away from the Chyoo site and the net for almost 2 weeks due to modem problems. While, I finally have access again and I was a bit disapointed to come back to only one new thread.

I have a promise and I have always lived up to it. My promise is for everybody who writes a thread to my story, I will write one to thiers. And the more they write, the more I write. I have almost 20 threads which I have contributed to other peoples stories and I enjoy helping them out.

Dacia, I recieved your thread and it was great! I approved it and it is now on my story. Also, I wrote a thread for your story and it is waiting for you. I appologize for the long delay before I could accept your thread. Hopefully it won't happen again.

Once again, I need new contributions to Keep my story alive... help me keep Sarah in school. Remember to stay in school! =)

thanks,
TIM (niceguy2002tim)

A COLLEGE GIRL TO BE...

 

[daciasdesire]

An update.

Hello all

Thanks must firstly go to niceguy2002tim for approving my thread and also for adding one to my own story. I recommend everyone check either of them out. Niceguy2002tim is now the sixth person to have contributed to my story now and it is really beginning to grow steadily now. Its two deepest threads are now 8 deep and it conprises a total of 27 pages. Some of the things ive been trying to do lately was get the story so that in no situation did the story end before getting to at least the 4th set of pages. Thats now accomplished. Secondly for all threads i wanted there to be a choice of two options to pick form, giving readers more options as where they would like to read. Baring one more thread to be added tonight this has also been done. Next i would like to have it so that everyone besides me who has added to my story, has a thread continuing on from thier own. Its encouraging i feel to have someone follow after you so you feel like your adition is helping to shape things and is appreciated. This may take me a few days to conplete fully. Until then keep reading and voting would be great also

Cheers

Dacia

 

[daciasdesire]

Im back.

Dear all.

Well I'm back to writting again after a break of around a week. I had a heap of assignments due and plus when i got back i'd lost my groove in a sense. The threads i was going to add to i suffered a major writters block. Luckily this was cured by adding to some of the threads i particularily enjoyed so far. They weren't what i said i was going to write on but it helped me get back into gear. Niceguy2002tim has been very kind in submitting two more threads to me. Thanks very much. I have returned the favour with my second thread to his story A College Girl To Be. Unfortunately the other got stuck along with my writters block but should be added shortly. Please all have a look for my writting there as well. In The Choices We Make ive added six new threads in the past two days. Two of which take it out to 9 deep. The grand total is up to 37 with a total of 6 contributiers. Story wise most direction are progressing quite steamily. Katherine and the main character are getting heavy in one and Trish and the main are seeing some action at the concert. Possible love interests so far are with Trish, Rebecca, Katherine, (You also have walked in on Kat's sis Emma changing,) Fiona and Kelly. Ive yet to really throw myself into writting full sex, im kind of hoping to follow someone lead as im lacking a bit of confedience as if i could write a good sex sence. Anyway ive written too much so i suggest veryone check it out

Thanks again

Dacia

 

[daciasdesire]

Milestone

Dear All

I have finally put the finishing touches to the last of the 5 deep threads. Therefore no matter what combination of choices there will be two different things to pick up to five deep. I dont think ill be able to do the same with the 6 deep threads as it would require me to add another 24 threads. The story is headed lots of new directions. Loads of new ideas. Ive also received 2 threads from lilguy that I have approved so check them out and thanks lilguy.

Cheers

Dacia

 

[daciasdesire]

Dear All

Turns out i missed on of the five deep threads so i have one more to add. Also i recieve a wonderful new thread from a new writter to my story. Avalon has written on what car happen if you get a blow job while trying to drive. Check it out. 49 threads so far, just one more until the magic half century.

Cheers

Dacia