"Heavy Lifting" poem by TheDr4KE, Vailyn

[Unmasked Poet]

Heavy Life: A Haiku
by TheDR4KE ©

Heavy:Monster's Face
by by Vailyn ©

Heavy Life: A Riddle
by TheDR4KE ©

 

[Vailyn]

Drake

Da Haiku

I like it! You were able to say in so little words something bout loss and parting. Very kewl.

Da Riddle

Only eight lines, but I can see two people having sex and the notion of how the act w/o emotions is "worthless". How the relationship was a great memory until it ended and then it became one of pain. Heh! I am personally a very wordy writer. So it is always interesting to see someone give meaning w/ less than more.

 

[SA Storm]

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[daughter]

Heavy: Monster's Face

Vailyn--

I like the cadence and sounds in your poem. I thought is was heavy on the drama in the tone of it, but perhaps that's just my personal bent.

Thanks for the read.

Peace,

daughter

 

[daughter]

Heavy Life: A Haiku

The DR4KE--

Succinct. Chilliing metaphor. Works for me.

Thanks for the read.

Peace,

daughter

 

[TheDR4KE]

re the Riddle

I was playing with the riddle form used by Tolkien in the Hobbit, and of course it's a fairly generic riddle structure. But I wanted to make it a bit more adult too The answer of course is Heart, the last word is the biggest hint of all.

I will have to try a longer poem soon, but I do enjoy the concise forms a lot

Drake

 

[Whispersecret]

Oh, I thought the answer was Love.

 

[TheDR4KE]

Oh, I thought the answer was Love.

Well, yes. Heart is the word that means love of course.



Drake

 

[Vailyn]

daughter

Yup! Suppose to be highly dramatic. Like vivid flashes of a memory or nightmare you never ever want to remember.

You know what's funny? When I made up the title, which outside of the contest is simply Monster's Face, I used it because of what I wrote towards the end of the poem. I didn't think it had a real connection. Then I went and reread my poem after a day passed and realized that my subconscious knew what it was doing.

Made me feel good! LOL