Hate to be THAT guy

[NicoliEstovich]

Hello all... I've put a couple of stories up here, but haven't used the forums really until now. To be honest, I'm usually a horror writer, and trying my pen in these saucily impure waters was something I hadn't done before, but I said, hell with it, lets give my baser instincts free rein.

Anyhoo, I was hoping - as we all are - for a little feedback. My scores have been pretty good, and that's good for keeping a bloke warm and fuzzy on lonely, ink-strewn nights, but it's words I desire. Words about me, good or bad, the currency we dabble in.

Any words would be greatly appreciated... poured over... cried over, and eventually swallowed in fine order!

http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=1094760&page=submissions

- Nicoli

 

[emap]

Hmmm let's see, bearded weirdo pops to mind fast.

OK in all seriousness, I think I got some left in me, you kinda need to remember your audience, especially around these parts. If literotica was mostly audio stories I'm pretty sure at least half of the readers would leap for joy. Reading comprehension is pretty low, so things like derma and whippoorwills are going to shoot right over their head. If your lucky they will just stop reading, if your not they will vote low.

Which will happen anyway if you veer off the course that reader wants their reading materials to follow, though so long as you stay out of loving wives you should avoid most of those.

 

[NicoliEstovich]

I can see it... didn't want to say it, lest I come off all "well of course you didn't dig my tale, being down amongst the muck of the intellectual food chain," but I could see it.

Thanks for the words And the beard was an experiment that ran its course, and thankfully, lives only in my profile of the minds of all who beheld it.

- Nicoli

 

[elfin_odalisque]

Glad the beard's gone.

Like the style, grubby smut with some humor and light on descriptions of fleshy hydraulics is a breath of fresh air round here - shouldn't say that having read On the Wagon. Scat is not my fetish at all so my judgement is worth diddleysquat.

Thought the one-handed harlot neatly done and snow-capped hills great but a tad muddled. Why the confusion over whether the girls were human or succubi, [replicants?], but the main plotline was deftly drawn.

All your stories could do with a bit tighter editing to eliminate typos and an over-indulgent use of 'by a hair'. Isn't 'derma' plural and it's difficult to sweat from both skin layers?

Repeating emap, you pitch at a high level and with an earthy and iconoclastic approach to erotica you may not become 'mainstream' here too easily but should have an enthusiastic cheer squad. Just looking for my pompoms.