*grumble grumble* Never edit while listening to Jock Jams.

[KillerMuffin]

I had to edit my edit. It's horrible, two edits in one. I hope I didn't miss anything. You have good sentence structure here check it out ya'll take your chance but I think you should probably stick in a predicate. These things get into it get into the trance this is the rhthym of the tribal dance tend to really help the reader understand what's going on with the their in the zone, baby get a T.O. action in the story.

Someone shoot me in the foot with a well used rubberband. I just wasted forty five minutes.

 

[Gus]

Beg pardon, what was that exactly?

 

[KillerMuffin]

See? Forty five minutes wasted, down the tubes. I blame Michael Jordan.

 

[nitengale]

I usually have to blame the dogs.

 

[Ulyssa]

I usually blame Secretary of Energy Spencer Abraham