Give us your worst

[Rob_Royale]

As there are already a few threads on our best stories, why not talk about our worst?
Tell us about the story that is currently posted on Literotica that you think is your worst.
Don't go by ratings or other metrics because we all know that low ratings often has nothing to do with the quality of the story or the writing. It's the word count, the category, the cheating wife, or the writers own shining personality.
So give us a link to this stinker of a story, tell us the category and why you think it's bad.

 

[Ian_Snow]

It's not my technical worst (that would probably be whatever fever dream inspired my Tifa fanfic story) but for the life of me I can't figure out why I tanked the buildup of Fooling With His Best Friend's Mom by having the whole thing be a bet. It's the dumbest writing decision I've made on this site and it baffles me.

 

[Rob_Royale]

My worst, far and away, is Pretty Please.
It was my first foray into the Incest category and I tried swinging for the fences, with a family affair. Failing utterly.

A young woman brings her betrothed home to her folks but in all their time together never bothered to mention that her parents were nudists, swingers and that incestuous sex between three generations isn't uncommon.

The idea is just so preposterous and crazy and the fact that this young man just adopted a 'when in Rome' attitude when most anyone would have freaked the fuck out. It was pretty early in my Lit career and the writing is rather poor in my opinion.

I have tried twice to rewrite it and salvage something out of the mess, but it's quite beyond saving I think.

The sad thing is that I rather like the characters. I'll likely use them again in something else.

 

[NuclearFairy]

Hmm, I think my worst would be The Parasite. It's my first short story, and like many of the earlier chapters of Neptune's blessings it's a bit rough around the edges.

It's full of actual measurements, and spelunking improbabilities that I should've spent more time researching. I also didn't spend as much time on it as I later learned to, so the descriptions are a little lacking in places.

It's about a girl who goes exploring in a cave and gets ambushed by a tentacle monster. But spoiler, the POV character is actually the symbiote within the girl, and it eats the tentacle monster mid deed.

I'm honestly surprised that it does have a score over 4.

 

[iwatchus]

I am writing it right now (okay once I get off the forum and do some work). People in the coffee house know what I am talking about. It grew out of a joke there. It is intentionally ridiculous targeted at Humor as a category and will be part of the Crime and Punishment event. My working description is Thomas Crown written as Rocky Horror with a full lesbian cast and hints of Little Mischief Theater. Lots of inside jokes for AH folk.

If it is only one point lower than my my current lowest rating, I will be surprised. But I am having fun writing it, so I will live what I get.

 

[MK_Whimsy]

The stories I would count among my worst are Sarcophagus and The Mummy's Trap. While I love the idea of supernatural mummy bondage, I don't think there is anything about these stories that makes them stand out in any special way. They are short, the plots are not fleshed out enough, and the titles are just lazy.

The one thing I do kind of like about them is that unlike my other stuff, these stories are entirely nonsexual, focusing exclusively on the bondage kink itself. That's one thing that sets them apart from the other stuff I've written.

 

[StillStunned]

By Voice and By Candle (4.5k words, rated 4.58* in E&V)

@Devinter left a comment that included: "This felt like a 10k words story told in less than 5k, if that makes sense. Still going to give you a 5-star score, but in truth, it's probably more like a 4,5 for me."

When someone as supportive and positive as him says this, you pay attention. And he was entirely right.

I do have an excuse. I'd written a story for the 2023 Halloween contest: nearly 20k words of Gothic/Ruritanian romance with emotion and death and all. But somehow it never made it to the contest list, even after I asked Laurel nicely.

So I set out to write another story for the contest, and I still think it's a pretty strong premise. A séance actually summons a spirit, and it likes to watch. The main character, who thankfully has an exhibitionist streak, has to come to terms with having the ghost in her life.

But I wrote it in a hurry, and I wanted to get to the juicy bits. The story would have benefitted from a much more controlled build-up. The spirit could have been so much more menacing, the conflict so much more pronounced, the ending so much more satisfying.

It's not a bad story, per se, but it deserved much more than I gave it.

 

[onehitwanda]

By Voice and By Candle (4.5k words, rated 4.58* in E&V)

@Devinter left a comment that included: "This felt like a 10k words story told in less than 5k, if that makes sense. Still going to give you a 5-star score, but in truth, it's probably more like a 4,5 for me."

@Devinter is hardly one to throw any stones, Girl Cum still ranks as one of the most revolting and hilarious things I've ever read.

 

[Pabiporffor]

I think it's A Christmas Carol. Obviously a parody of Dickens but based on an ex slut who's lost her way and gets visited by the whores of Christmas past.

I wrote it as a morality tale warning women of the importance of keeping their legs open during the Christmas period but I felt I never really got the message across.

 

[EmilyMiller]

I think my worst story is probably Your Love’s Whore in R/NC. It was for one of the music challenges, and is based on the lyrics of the Wolf Alice song. It’s an ugly tale about a woman with low-self esteem allowing herself to be knowingly used and taken for granted, and just trying harder because “I can only love you more.”

It’s not really R/NC, more that she thinks she is worthless aside from as an occasional sexual prop for her on again off again boyfriend, who is much happier having threesomes with his freind’s sexy girlfriend.

It’s bleak and doesn’t have a HEA. But it’s not a million miles from the actual experience of a subset of women. And is an exaggerated version of what a wider cohort of other women suffer seemingly willingly, or as they see no other better option. Don’t expect hot sex, jokes, or Star Wars references.

It depressed me to write it.

 

[THBGato]

It's probably "Coda" https://www.literotica.com/s/coda-10-songs

If only because:
a) it will make very little sense if you haven't read my story "The third date";
b) most of it is song lyrics, so it's questionable how much of it is actually my story.
It's 750 words. Its score is frankly bizzarre and kind of an insult to many of my other stories (not to mention those of other writers) that are much better yet have lower scores.

 

[PennyThompson]

I'm not very happy with how I ended my Adventures of Penny Thompson series with Dr. Grace Takes Her Medicine.

I never planned to write 9 chapters, the first three chapters were written very instinctively without a lot of consideration to a complete story arc. I loved and cared for all of the characters in it very deeply, but by the end I was ready to move on to try writing other things.

So I did my best to wrap up some dangling plot threads efficiently, to resolve a character conflict that I set up many chapters earlier, and to give everyone a happy ending. I don't hate it, there are parts and scenes and dialog in it that I still really like! But I do feel it's my weakest work.

On the other hand, I do think I learned a lot from it! I've leaned into much more discrete stories since then, either one-offs or self-contained episodic stories that don't put me into a bind later

 

[Gamblnluck]

My worst score wise was not because of technical skill etc. It was because it ran against the previous story character's. I saw a character as being a clinically depressed woman and decided to tell a sequel from her point of view as I imagined it once she got help.
Now as I said then and I will say now, I loved the original author's story and rated it a 5. I just saw a different slant to the tale and wrote about it. I got my lowest score ever and one of my TOP number of comments. Most wanted to take me out and quarter me in the town square. They were those who didn't say I was an ignorant asshole who deserved to rot in hell (after getting a series of STD's). Even my good comments more or less said it was well conceived and written but I missed the mark.

 

[KittyOfSteele]

Anything before 2024 is my worse.

 

[MrPixel]

What? Not mine! Every one of 'em is a shining jewel just waiting for a literary agent to discover my wonderfulness!



I nominate Do I Have to Edge, Too? as my worst. It was a seed of an idea force-fit into a 750-word contribution.

 

[Voboy]

I don't really like all that many of my 750-worders. I'm proud of a couple, but I won't include them here because I don't really think of them as "stories," more as "exercises."

I'll choose A Stranger On The Beach, which doesn't really have a story to tell. I've got a few other tales like that, and they all kinda stink. But that's my least favorite one. I post stories like that because I like them, ultimately, but those ones are hard for me to like.

 

[MelissaBaby]

Watchers

The great horror writer Ramsay Campbell wrote an introduction to his novel The Face That Must Die describing how his mother's schizophrenia inspired much of his writing. It is a harrowing read. I've never forgotten his telling of how she saw faces in the walls, watching her.

I wanted to base an erotic Halloween story on that concept, thinking it could play with issues of exhibitionism and voyeurism. When I couldn't make it work, I tried switching the perspective from the person being watched to that of the watchers.

That turned into a plot in which a woman is brutally murdered in a sleazy motel room by a serial killer. She haunts the room for years, living vicariously through watching those who make use of the room (again, the e/v angle) and training herself to be able to physically interact with the living world. Eventually, her killer returns to the room with another intended victim, and she has a chance at revenge.

It's a good plot idea, imo, and I've posted on the board that if anyone wants to run with it, it's theirs. The problem with it was that working on it brought up too many dark memories from my own experiences, enough so that I had to put it aside.

I still wanted to have something for the Halloween contest, so I barnstormed on a different take on the "watchers in the wall" concept. In this one, a young man, a voyeur, attends a Halloween party, where he meets a mysterious woman and goes home with her. Of course, she is not what she seems...

It was a rush job and it shows. In addition, I wrote a climax that I realized was a certain violation of Lit's sex/death rule, and I had to rewrite a very unsatisfactory ending.

It's my lowest scoring story, and deservedly so.

 

[Not2Pervy]

Ask me on another day and I might answer differently, but one I feel bad about is last year’s Halloween entry “Friend Zone” Nightmare. I wanted to enter the contest. I didn’t have any great ideas, so I forced it. There are a few good things in there. It kind of holds together. But that’s only because I’d learned how to do the shtick. I wasn’t really feeling it, and I think it shows. Missed a couple plot holes too.

 

[WCSGarland]

My worst is probably my first entry for the 2025 Valentine's Day contest - What Would Cupid Do?
Barely over the minimum word count, pure ribald joke take on the Greek story of Cupid and Psyche.

 

[Erozetta]

Monsters, Friends, and Mistakes

It was a quick and stupid premise that I had fun with. No regrets on writing it, just wish I'd given a little more effort to the actual story.

It's D&D mixed with a Resident Evil name scheme joke, and accidental exhibitionism that results in fucking a friend from her D&D group.

The accidental exhibitionism involves a drider fantasy. All leggy appendages and power.

 

[Bamagan]

I wrote a contest entry (Stardust) for the summer thing shortly after I started publishing here. It got shifted into lesbian, which I think was possibly a mistake since it's got more kink than normal for the category... some self hypnosis and petplay, a little bullying, although it does have a more or less HEA ending. Anyway, in retrospect it should probably have been about twice as long as the 5k words I trimmed it to, especially considering the category (it was originally sent to mind control but I said I was open to other options). I don't really think it's bad, but it's not strong.

 

[Djmac1031]

Probably "A Karen Gets Her Comeuppance."

It started life as a joke, a parody of all those Karen stories the flooded our social media feeds.

I really meant for it to be funny, but as it progressed it turned dark. Too dark, to the point it became a Non Con / Reluctant story. A genre I'm really not a fan of. And there I was, writing one.

Then, to make it worse, I decided to tack on a "Alternate Twist Ending," that turned the Non Con aspects into *SPOILER ALERT* just a couple engaged in some seriously deranged role play.

Its basically a convoluted mess. a result of me kinda overthinking everything.

Still, it currently sits at a 4.32 rating, so readers didn't utterly trash it and a lot of folks actually liked it.

Hey, it was still pretty early on for me. I consider it a learning experience. It's certainly not my best work but I'm not ashamed of the story either.

https://www.literotica.com/s/a-karen-gets-her-comeuppance

 

[DeMont]

As there are already a few threads on our best stories, why not talk about our worst?
Tell us about the story that is currently posted on Literotica that you think is your worst.
Don't go by ratings or other metrics because we all know that low ratings often has nothing to do with the quality of the story or the writing. It's the word count, the category, the cheating wife, or the writers own shining personality.
So give us a link to this stinker of a story, tell us the category and why you think it's bad.

@Rob_Royale,
Good evening my dear colleague. I have only four published works up at present, I really couldn't call any of them "the worst" but the one I would say I am "less pleased" with the end product is "Supernauts". It's not that it's written, or composed badly but it just doesn't do proper justice to what it should have been.
Respectfully,D.

 

[Actingup]

Great idea for a thread. My worst is 'Crapshooting', which coincidentally I mentioned to somebody privately earlier today. Score of 3.93 in Loving Wives, which is not horrible but did reflect some valid reader discomfort with my insane story premise, the stupidity of the MCs and the amount of gratuitous sex. I still like it and I had a lot of fun with it, but I could have restrained myself a little!

As for the premise... best if female MC Lily explains, in the words she uses to her husband (narrator) Jim and tennis partners Robyn and Steve in the story. It came from a stray thought that I was getting a bit sick of reading about free love without contraception: these guys needed consequences.

Lily turned to look directly at me, apologetically. "If we're going to wait at least a year before IVF, which is very expensive anyway, I was thinking that we shouldn't just be burning down the candle and doing the same old thing. We could have a kind of a sperm crapshoot. One month with each other, and then swap partners. Rinse and repeat. Winner takes the prize."

I stared. "You mean..."

Robyn butted in. "What do you mean 'winner takes the prize?'"

It was Steve who explained. "I think that what she means is that Jim and I would swap between beds, a month at a time, and if one of you gets pregnant, then whoever the father is will stay with that woman. If it's me and you, we stay the same. But if it's you and Jim... I move out. Hopefully in with Lily but..." He stopped, and swallowed. "But I guess, not necessarily, because whoever doesn't get pregnant might be considering her options."

Lily just nodded, and said nothing, still looking towards me. She seemed to be shocked at herself.

"Fuck, Lily, that's... radical," breathed Robyn. She sounded more awestruck than censorious.