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[balmoral]

This was written by a friend (who gave his permission to share it). I found a great deal of beauty in the rawness, the courage of this piece (his 1st that i know of). I'm sure any words of encouragement would be appreciated.

is it the last time?

i've seen the twinkle in your eye
the demure downward glance
the look that says I want you
now

is it the last time?
we press together, hands roaming
lips softly meeting,
just the right pressure
soft bite

is it the last time?
we breathe heavily in knowing expectation
of familiar pleasure to come
trust that comes with love
truth

is it the last time?
my teeth gently close on your nipple
I hear your unrestrained euphony
then feel the tug on my belt
zip

is it the last time?
the seratonin kicks in
as i begin my eager plunge
between your legs skewed open
lick

is it the last time?
i'm intoxicated by your aroma amour
as i softly encircle
before purposefully prodding
pulse

is it the last time?
I've had you squirming beneath me
tongue in control of our delerium
begging to be fucked
please

is it the last time?
I'm enveloped by you
holding on for dear life
hearing you urge me to continue
just like that

is it the last time?
I watch your hands, lips and tongue
master my manhood - revealing
my love explosion
gawd

 

[WickedEve]

There are some good lines in this poem, and a few overused phrases, like twinkle in your eye. Basically, it's pretty good.
balmoral, do you also write poetry?

 

[balmoral]

There are some good lines in this poem, and a few overused phrases, like twinkle in your eye. Basically, it's pretty good.
balmoral, do you also write poetry?

W/Eve, thank you for your insight ... tho' i've only done a bit of lurking on the poetry board, i value your opinion

i used to write a little poetry ... mostly 'snippets' of poems (i can't decide if they're unfinished or whether i have undiagnosed a.d.d. )

 

[WickedEve]

W/Eve, thank you for your insight ... tho' i've only done a bit of lurking on the poetry board, i value your opinion

i used to write a little poetry ... mostly 'snippets' of poems (i can't decide if they're unfinished or whether i have undiagnosed a.d.d. )

I understand snippets. I'm sure I have more of those than I do complete poems. So... tell your friend to visit the board. And you're more than welcome to share your snippets. We could start a snippet challenge thread. We start challenge threads for everything. lol

 

[balmoral]

I understand snippets. I'm sure I have more of those than I do complete poems. So... tell your friend to visit the board. And you're more than welcome to share your snippets. We could start a snippet challenge thread. We start challenge threads for everything. lol

okay! lol ... thanks, w/eve, for making me feel welcome (i don't know if my friend will visit, tho' ~ that was his 1st piece and he may be feeling a bit shell-shocked)

anyhoo, here are a few 'snippets' i pulled from the archives ~ chosen not for their believed artistry but, rather, for the fact that i remembered the password ... w/eve, would you care to share a 'snippet' or two?

epiphany

i love you so much and i don’t
want to be her
the one who hides
while the other seeks

from the small room

on the narrowest of beds
in my loveless room
i dreamed dreamed dreamed
you

bestowed you with
the finest trappings
scrounged from books

conceived a union of silk and steel
of artist’s hands and lover’s mouth

and refused to believe
i could not make flesh
the flawlessness i conjured

simply

the way you give then
take away
intrigues and disillusions me

so many ways to
love and yet
not as many chances

delicacy

i never knew where that poppy came from
had never seen flesh sprout from the earth
delicately cup the sun, swallow the moon

visitors

when we are in our delicate sphere
when it flowers inside me
i get to be my best self

thank you for knowing that
we could never live there

still
it’s such a lovely place to visit

 

[WickedEve]

There is definitely some good stuff in your snippets. I can see most of them growing into some very good poems. I found a lot of snippets last night while cleaning out some files. I'm sure some will become poems. I'll see if I have any worthy of sharing.

 

[balmoral]

There is definitely some good stuff in your snippets. I can see most of them growing into some very good poems. I found a lot of snippets last night while cleaning out some files. I'm sure some will become poems. I'll see if I have any worthy of sharing.

great! i look forward to reading yours ...

(and t/y very much for the encouragement, w/eve ... i've been wondering if some of these snippets could be parts of the same poem, written at different times and not connected ... must try to remember all passwords and have another look at this stuff )