Free Universal: Another new author seeking feedback

[Londonchap]

As a first-time author, some months ago I used the "New Story Advertisements" thread to seek comments on the story I'd just started to post in the Novels/Novellas category: Free Universal Carnal Knowledge.

The premise is that an average man suddenly acquires extraordinary sexual power. OK, we've all seen that before, but my idea was to make the setting, and particularly the female characters, as realistic as possible: what would happen (I asked myself) if such a thing could occur in the real world?

heaven-whh kindly replied almost at once to say that the first three chapters, which were the only ones posted at that time, were little more than a promising start.

Fair comment, I thought, so I promised myself that when it was finished I'd advertise it again. So now that all 46 chapters are up on the site, I'd be extremely grateful if anyone were willing to take a look and post an opinion. All comments, be they complimentary, critical or all points in between, are obviously more than welcome.

If I've got this to work correctly, there's a link to Chapter 1 below.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/sh....php?id=336326

 

[mjl2010]

Jeez Pete Man! 46 chapters and you want us to "have a look"? Um. I'll look at a couple I guess. But don't expect feedback overnight on the whole thing.

MJL

 

[Londonchap]

Thanks MJL. Glad of views on any part of the story.

I see your point, but it's a problem for writers of longer stories. If we ask for comments when only part of the story is posted, people say they want to see the whole thing. But if we wait until it's all up, they say it's an awful lot to read.

I'm not criticising anyone, and to be honest I have some sympathy with both points of view ... but I'd still love to get some feedback.

 

[mjl2010]

I write longer stuff too. I know what you mean. I am bookmarking your submission page and will have a look and do some serious reading over the weekend.

MJL