for a kiddie poem, how bad is this?

[ShamelessFlirt]

"Orange"


I love the English language
enough to make up a word
One that would be useful
one obviously never heard

Because I love to write
and rhyming is what I do
I'd create a word
to rhyme a word
to see this poem through

A nonsense word
like "nonrenge"
is the word I would create
cause then I could rhyme orange
and that would be really great

It's meaning would be apparent
"to make up a nonsense word"
so that finally poems about orange
could be composed, read aloud and heard

 

[hotti]

I think it's adorable. It would make a child think, which is a worthwhile endeavour, certainly. It would get them to ponder the possiblities of language - starting with the concept that they can make up WORDS, and meanings too. Then they'd realize that they can CREATE using words - theirs or real ones.


Just one question, Flirt... how do you pronounce 'nonrenge'? lol, I understand that it rhymes with orange, but I can't wrap my brain or my lips around it to make it do so. It's that second n, I think. (It's early in the morning, and I do not do mornings well *G*)

 

[ShamelessFlirt]

Only one question?

non-ren-gee

I wanted to use non as a prefix so at least that much wasn't made up

 

[hotti]

Gotchya! *G*

 

[ShamelessFlirt]

Gotchya! *G*

You sure do

 

[daughter]

Do you have children

Shameless--

Do you have children? If yes, do you read any poetry to them?

Peace,

daughter

 

[ShamelessFlirt]

Sure do

Shameless--

Do you have children? If yes, do you read any poetry to them?

Peace,

daughter

I have one of each, a boy and a girl.

Here's another I wrote to read to my son

"Dinosaur"

In the distance,
hear that roar?
Look out!
It's a dinosaur!

Now you better,
watch your back.
Otherwise,
he might attack.

Two tons heavy,
twelve feet tall.
Armored hide,
and teeth that maul.

He certainly is,
an awesome sight!
Guaranteed,
to give a fright.

Wait a minute,
there was no roar!
It's only daddy,
at the door!

 

[daughter]

I have a daughter

She likes poetry. We have a favorite collection, "Honey, I Love" by Eloise Greenfield. We have a few more on our shelves.

Children poets are often enjoyed by adults as much as by children. Shel Silverstein comes to mind.

Peace,

daughter

 

[JennyOmanHill]

Very nice, Shameless

It seems you're letting more of your sensitive side show lately!

I think both poems are just adorable, and it brought me back to the days (oh so long ago!) when reading words and putting them together to get images was indeed an amazing discovery!

It seems "full circle" for me to be back in a forum where the written word still produces such vivid imagery (in Lit's case, sometimes too vivid!).

 

[lovetoread]

Very well done,shameless.

Its wonderful for you to pass this on to your children.

 

[ShamelessFlirt]

My son actually helped with the dinosaur poem. I asked him what he thought of when someone said dinosaur. We took the descriptive words and rhymed them. I of course provided the plot twist ...lol

 

[ShamelessFlirt]

11 year old thought process

THE FOLLOWING ARE ALL QUOTES FROM 11-YEAR-OLDS' SCIENCE EXAMS:

1. "Water is composed of two gins, Oxygin and Hydrogin.
Oxygin is pure gin. Hydrogin is gin and water."
2. "When you breathe, you inspire. When you do not breathe, you expire."
3. "H20 is hot water, and CO2 is cold water."
4. "To collect fumes of sulphur, hold down a deacon over a flame in test tube"
5. "When you smell an odorless gas, it is probably carbon monoxide"
6. "Three kinds of blood vessels are arteries, vanes, and caterpillars."
7. "Blood flows down one leg and up the other."
8. "Respiration is composed of two acts, first inspiration, and then expectoration."
9. "The moon is a planet just like the earth, only it is even deader "
10. "Dew is formed on leaves when the sun shines down on them and makes them perspire."
11. "A super-saturated solution is one that holds more than it can hold."
12. "Mushrooms always grow in damp places and so they look like umbrellas."
13. "The body consists of three parts - the brainium, the borax and the abominable cavity. The brainium contains the brain, the borax contains the heart and lungs, and the abominable cavity contains the bowels, of which there are five - a, e, I, o and u."

14. "Momentum: What you give a person when they are going away."
15. "Planet: A body of earth surrounded by sky."
16. "Rhubarb: a kind of celery gone bloodshot."
17. "Before giving a blood transfusion, find out if the blood is
affirmative or negative."
18. "To remove dust from the eye, pull the eye down over the nose."
19. "For a nosebleed: put the nose much lower than the body until the heart stops."
20. "For Fainting: Rub the person's chest or, if a lady, rub her arm above the hand instead."
21. "For head cold: use an agonizer to spray the nose until it drops in your throat."
22. "To keep milk from turning sour: keep it in the cow."
23. "The pistol of a flower is its only protection against insects."
24. "The alimentary canal is located in the northern part of Indiana."
25. "The skeleton is what is left after the insides have been taken out and the outsides have been taken off. The purpose of the skeleton is something to hitch meat to."
26. "A permanent set of teeth consists of eight canines, eight cuspids, two molars, and eight cuspidors."
27. "A fossil is an extinct animal. The older it is, the more extinct it is."
28. "Equator: A managerie lion running around the Earth through Africa."
29. "Liter: A nest of young puppies."
30. "Magnet: Something you find crawling all over a dead cat."

 

[JennyOmanHill]

Priceless

THE FOLLOWING ARE ALL QUOTES FROM 11-YEAR-OLDS' SCIENCE EXAMS: .....
1. "Water is composed of two gins, Oxygin and Hydrogin.
Oxygin is pure gin. Hydrogin is gin and water."
...
3. "H20 is hot water, and CO2 is cold water."
...
9. "The moon is a planet just like the earth, only it is even deader "
10. "Dew is formed on leaves when the sun shines down on them and makes them perspire."
11. "A super-saturated solution is one that holds more than it can hold."
12. "Mushrooms always grow in damp places and so they look like umbrellas."
...
15. "Planet: A body of earth surrounded by sky."
...
20. "For Fainting: Rub the person's chest or, if a lady, rub her arm above the hand instead."

I selected my favorites! I especially like # 20, especially for us at Lit.!
Thanks....

 

[JennyOmanHill]

An early innocent attempt

In my preteen years I wrote a little ditty that set me up for a lot of teasing! (I was really naive way back then!):

Eyeballs

I have two little eyeballs
They are soft and brown.
They smile when I'm happy,
and cry when I'm down.

(there was a middle verse here which escapes me totally now, thank goodness!)

Some people don't have eyeballs
Like most people should.
I would give them my balls,
If I only could.

Those last two lines haunted me for months! Surely the end of my innocence.