p_c352006
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I am trying to figure out all the details of a rough story idea I am currently bouncing around in my head and am looking for some feedback, suggestions, etc.
This is what I have so far
Single girl in the women's section of a large department store. Could be the bathing suit section, normal attire, or maybe even a lingerie store. I am leaning towards just normal outfits, skirts, pants, etc.
While walking through the store and looking at various outfits, sizes, etc. she catches eyes with a man. He's a little older, probably in his late 30's or early 40's. She smiles at him and he smiles back and that's when she notices his wife beside him digging through a rack of clothes. She is roughly the same age he is, but clearly not in as good of shape. She has a pretty face, and was probably hot back in her day but it's obvious that she hasn't seen a gym in a few years and is at least 20-30 pounds overweight. "Are you even listening?!" She yells at him as his attention returns to his wife and she returns to her shopping while complaining about how he never listens
My character can't help but notice that every time she glances back over towards the couple, the man is looking in her direction. She feels strange knowing this married man keeps looking at her but she also feels a little flattered to be such an object of his focus. She even feels a little bad for him. He seems to be in good shape and pretty handsome for an older guy, but his wife is a being extremely annoying with all of her nagging. Even some of the other customers in the store are lookign over and rolling their eyes to themselves as they watch her complain about everything and nothing.
After browsing for a while my character takes some clothes into a fitting room and pulls the curtain shut. She is just layin out the different outfits she brought in when she hears a woman enter the fitting room while giving cammands to her husband. She seems a bit abrassive to say the least. Honestly, she kind of seems like a bitch.
She hears the curtain of the fitting room next to her shut and realizes by the fact that this woman is still taking to her husband that he must be sitting on one of the benches just outside the curtains. That's also when she notices that when she closed the curtain of her fitting room she left a small gap between the wall and curtain open. Does she casually make a move to close the small gap? Would he even notice it anyway?
She decides to leave it alone, assuming it's not likely he will notice.
She can't help but hear the woman in the next room complaining about how they must be making sizes smaller these days as she bitches about things being too tight. Looking into the mirror at the reflection of the curtain behind her she can see movement on the other side. Then she sees him... well part of him. About one eyeball and part of his face is lined right up with the gap in the curtain as he sits across the small hall between his wife's fitting room and hers. Not only did he notice the gap but now he's watching.
I envision her being nervous at first, but deciding that this poor guy must have it pretty rough at home and decides to make his day by trying on her outfits even though she knows he's watching. I haven't decided on the outfits, or how she poses and changes while he watches. I do think that at a certain point she will acknowledge that she knows he's watching by giving him a wink or something.
I also have an idea about his wife asking him to get other sizes in some clothes and when he leaves to do so he also comes back with some outfits he wants to see his new model in and sets them just inside the curtain or on the floor.
It could be a story that eventually leads to sex or a blow job in the fitting room while his wife is trying on clothes next door. Or maybe it stays with little more than a tease and strip show as she tries on various outfits for him. As he drops off another outfit, she could reach out and take it from him but in the process guide his hand inside the fitting room and place it somewhere on her body. Maybe she notices his cell phone on the bench outside the fitting room as he retrieves more clothing in different sizes for his wife and decides to grab it quickly and snap a few special shots for him and return the phone before he gets back. Wouldn't that be a nice surpise later when he opens his photos
What do you guys think?
What do you like? What don't you like?
What else could I add or what suggestions do you have for me?
Thanks for your feedback everyone
This is what I have so far
Single girl in the women's section of a large department store. Could be the bathing suit section, normal attire, or maybe even a lingerie store. I am leaning towards just normal outfits, skirts, pants, etc.
While walking through the store and looking at various outfits, sizes, etc. she catches eyes with a man. He's a little older, probably in his late 30's or early 40's. She smiles at him and he smiles back and that's when she notices his wife beside him digging through a rack of clothes. She is roughly the same age he is, but clearly not in as good of shape. She has a pretty face, and was probably hot back in her day but it's obvious that she hasn't seen a gym in a few years and is at least 20-30 pounds overweight. "Are you even listening?!" She yells at him as his attention returns to his wife and she returns to her shopping while complaining about how he never listens
My character can't help but notice that every time she glances back over towards the couple, the man is looking in her direction. She feels strange knowing this married man keeps looking at her but she also feels a little flattered to be such an object of his focus. She even feels a little bad for him. He seems to be in good shape and pretty handsome for an older guy, but his wife is a being extremely annoying with all of her nagging. Even some of the other customers in the store are lookign over and rolling their eyes to themselves as they watch her complain about everything and nothing.
After browsing for a while my character takes some clothes into a fitting room and pulls the curtain shut. She is just layin out the different outfits she brought in when she hears a woman enter the fitting room while giving cammands to her husband. She seems a bit abrassive to say the least. Honestly, she kind of seems like a bitch.
She hears the curtain of the fitting room next to her shut and realizes by the fact that this woman is still taking to her husband that he must be sitting on one of the benches just outside the curtains. That's also when she notices that when she closed the curtain of her fitting room she left a small gap between the wall and curtain open. Does she casually make a move to close the small gap? Would he even notice it anyway?
She decides to leave it alone, assuming it's not likely he will notice.
She can't help but hear the woman in the next room complaining about how they must be making sizes smaller these days as she bitches about things being too tight. Looking into the mirror at the reflection of the curtain behind her she can see movement on the other side. Then she sees him... well part of him. About one eyeball and part of his face is lined right up with the gap in the curtain as he sits across the small hall between his wife's fitting room and hers. Not only did he notice the gap but now he's watching.
I envision her being nervous at first, but deciding that this poor guy must have it pretty rough at home and decides to make his day by trying on her outfits even though she knows he's watching. I haven't decided on the outfits, or how she poses and changes while he watches. I do think that at a certain point she will acknowledge that she knows he's watching by giving him a wink or something.
I also have an idea about his wife asking him to get other sizes in some clothes and when he leaves to do so he also comes back with some outfits he wants to see his new model in and sets them just inside the curtain or on the floor.
It could be a story that eventually leads to sex or a blow job in the fitting room while his wife is trying on clothes next door. Or maybe it stays with little more than a tease and strip show as she tries on various outfits for him. As he drops off another outfit, she could reach out and take it from him but in the process guide his hand inside the fitting room and place it somewhere on her body. Maybe she notices his cell phone on the bench outside the fitting room as he retrieves more clothing in different sizes for his wife and decides to grab it quickly and snap a few special shots for him and return the phone before he gets back. Wouldn't that be a nice surpise later when he opens his photos
What do you guys think?
What do you like? What don't you like?
What else could I add or what suggestions do you have for me?
Thanks for your feedback everyone
