I would like to share a very small clip of some of my writing. I have never done this before, so I would really like some feedback. I really enjoy writing and reading erotica, along with other fiction.
Let me know your thoughts, hopefully I will have a story I'm working on finished by the weekend so I can post.
Lola07
"Husband is just getting home from work"
This is What I Want:
To be on my knees in front of you, you are fully clothed, but I want you to remove your clothes for me, very slowly. The entire time you are removing your clothing, you are looking at me. The look in your eyes tells me what you want to do to me, and what you are anticipating what I am going to do to you.
I want to run my hand over your prick and feel it jump under my touch, just for me. I close my eyes and rub my face against your cock as a cat would rub against its owner’s leg to encourage petting. You pet me, by touching my face every so soft and run your hand through my hair at the nape of my neck. You try to nudge me forward to you aching cock, but I resist. I want to take my time in seducing you; you are to come when I am ready for you to come. My mouth runs along your swollen member, and you jump at my hot breath. I want to feel the contours of your head against my lips, and I have memorized every texture and detail of you.
You grab my hair and my head falls back, to look you right in the eye. That look you give is what gets me so wet, as if you are so very close to loosing your control. I know you; you will do your best to control yourself, just to see what comes next. “Please” you say, and with the tension in your voice, I take you deep into my throat. Oh, the moans from your throat are doing more for me that I think they are doing for you. I inch my hands up your thighs and feel the rough hairs I love so much. Your smell of soap and the cologne are an aphrodisiac to my senses. I cup your balls and squeeze just enough for your pleasure and you moan again. I can hear you are breathing becoming ragged.
I taste the salt of my efforts on my tongue and then a moan erupts from me. This tells me I am doing a fine job. Deeper into heated mouth and run my hand down my stomach to find my sweet spot. The ache is too much; pleasing you this way is too overwhelming. I slide up and down your length, and I want to come with you, I want to hear my name on your lips as you do so. Your hands cannot contain themselves, oh your hands. I feel you cup my breast. A slight tug at my nipple sends a pulse at my core.
Leaving my hair, your hands caress down my back to my ass. I have to stop touching myself. My hands are just hovering above my clit, because I am not ready to come yet. I feel you slid between my ass cheeks, and the edginess returns with a vengeance, it makes no difference if I am touching my clit or not. With all the sensations, I begin to engulf you down my through. You must feel the same, because you start pumping and fucking my mouth with relentless force. Oh so close, you are still playing with my ass. The sensation is so overwhelming; I do not think I can hold out anymore. Panting and starting to ride against your hand just as relentless as you are fucking my mouth. I can hear your breathing hitch over my panting and your say, “Come now baby, lets come together. I can’t hold out anymore”.
Let me know your thoughts, hopefully I will have a story I'm working on finished by the weekend so I can post.
Lola07
"Husband is just getting home from work"
This is What I Want:
To be on my knees in front of you, you are fully clothed, but I want you to remove your clothes for me, very slowly. The entire time you are removing your clothing, you are looking at me. The look in your eyes tells me what you want to do to me, and what you are anticipating what I am going to do to you.
I want to run my hand over your prick and feel it jump under my touch, just for me. I close my eyes and rub my face against your cock as a cat would rub against its owner’s leg to encourage petting. You pet me, by touching my face every so soft and run your hand through my hair at the nape of my neck. You try to nudge me forward to you aching cock, but I resist. I want to take my time in seducing you; you are to come when I am ready for you to come. My mouth runs along your swollen member, and you jump at my hot breath. I want to feel the contours of your head against my lips, and I have memorized every texture and detail of you.
You grab my hair and my head falls back, to look you right in the eye. That look you give is what gets me so wet, as if you are so very close to loosing your control. I know you; you will do your best to control yourself, just to see what comes next. “Please” you say, and with the tension in your voice, I take you deep into my throat. Oh, the moans from your throat are doing more for me that I think they are doing for you. I inch my hands up your thighs and feel the rough hairs I love so much. Your smell of soap and the cologne are an aphrodisiac to my senses. I cup your balls and squeeze just enough for your pleasure and you moan again. I can hear you are breathing becoming ragged.
I taste the salt of my efforts on my tongue and then a moan erupts from me. This tells me I am doing a fine job. Deeper into heated mouth and run my hand down my stomach to find my sweet spot. The ache is too much; pleasing you this way is too overwhelming. I slide up and down your length, and I want to come with you, I want to hear my name on your lips as you do so. Your hands cannot contain themselves, oh your hands. I feel you cup my breast. A slight tug at my nipple sends a pulse at my core.
Leaving my hair, your hands caress down my back to my ass. I have to stop touching myself. My hands are just hovering above my clit, because I am not ready to come yet. I feel you slid between my ass cheeks, and the edginess returns with a vengeance, it makes no difference if I am touching my clit or not. With all the sensations, I begin to engulf you down my through. You must feel the same, because you start pumping and fucking my mouth with relentless force. Oh so close, you are still playing with my ass. The sensation is so overwhelming; I do not think I can hold out anymore. Panting and starting to ride against your hand just as relentless as you are fucking my mouth. I can hear your breathing hitch over my panting and your say, “Come now baby, lets come together. I can’t hold out anymore”.
