first timer looking for comments

[klimt13]

Hi, just had my first story posted after thinking about submitting it for a long time. I have gotten decent ratings so far, but no comments. Please feel free to not hold back. If it is bad, I need to know what I can do better next time or if there should even be a next time.

Also, wasn't quite sure which category to use, so I picked "fetish." If you think it belongs somewhere else, that would be good to know as well.

Here is the link:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=433725

Thanks in advance!

 

[CJMasterson]

Very Good

That was a very good story. I am not much for this particular fetish, but it was very well written and had me going. I especially liked the beginning, not telling the reader the fantasy, it's a great way to get them hooked!