First Story

[biggysmallz]

Hey everyone, I've finally made the jump and wrote my first story for the site. It's half-fiction/half-true. Basically the first 70% of the story is true, but the sexual episode in it was actually a dream I had the night after the "kiss heard round the room" moment.

I feel its a pretty decent story, but I'm looking for someone else's opinion before I post it. If anyone is interested in editing it and giving me some pointers let me know. It's a little over 10 pages long in Microsoft Word Processor. Don't know how long that would make it on the site.

PS: I changed names so nobody would get hurt just incase they also check out Lit.

 

[biggysmallz]

Also, for those that would need to know what type of story it is.

It's a story about me being in love with my friend's girlfriend. After time she falls out of love with him but is too scared to leave. But there is a twist in it, it's not the usual "winds up with the good guy" stories.

 

[CWatson]

Awesome. Is it on the site? Can we read it? It's hard to discuss if we can't read it. =P

 

[caprine]

I agree with...

Awesome. Is it on the site? Can we read it? It's hard to discuss if we can't read it. =P

CWatson; we have to read it to be able to discuss the story. Also, if you're a really new author, I can give you the address of a site for authors of erotica to critique each other's work. I learned a lot on that site as a newbie author myself. Also, the writer helps on this site are a good place to get a grasp of the basics of writing.


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...I feel more alive when I’m writing than I do at any other time—except when I’m making love. Two things when you forget time, when nothing exists except the moment—the moment of writing, the moment of love. That perfect concentration is bliss.”
- May Sarton