First Story would love feedback

[Faleena]

First Time

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Lustfully yours,

Faleena

 

[AlinaX]

You're not supposed to post stories here, or extracts longer than three paragraphs. If you have published this on Literotica, please provide a link instead.

ETA: Try adding in actual dialogue. Also, could be an interesting exercise to write this story in present tense.