Lord_Dunsay
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My primary goal is to improve my writing skills by "putting myself out there" as they say. So my main goal is finding an editor that isn't afraid to crack the whip on occasion. (I work so much better with a deadline!)
Secondly I wanted to get feedback from those editors here who are familiar with the editing process and what is acceptable based on the writer's guidelines if my submission is "out of bounds" as far as content goes. The excerpt can also serve as an example of the sort of editing help I will need from a grammatical standpoint.
Finally my story is the 1st chapter of a period piece, 1940's England and I haven't really decided on a particular category, the first 4000 words would probably fit "Mature" as the protaganist is a late 30's English widow trying to find a mate, and ends up pleasuring a younger man. The next chapters aren't necessarily mature and little more than vague ideas right now.
Obviously any editors with experience in this period would be fortuitous.
Here is my excerpt, which I had questions about its suitability for Literotica. The main character catches her servants talking about bestiality commited by a neighboring lad and listens in on them:
“Oh yes, Sarah said she saw it quite clearly, as big as a horses, she did.” Katherine recognized Maggie’s voice. Maggie was quite fetching, with dark curly locks cut above the shoulder and greenish-hazel eyes. It amazed Katherine that such an innocent looking young lass could be talking this way.
“The rumor I have heard,” Katherine crept closer as the voices dropped an octave or two. “He fancies his sheep, buggers them he does!” Katherine’s eyes widened at the last part, she pegged the voice as Bertie’s. They could only be talking about Johnny Cork, son of the late William whose family had leased the northwestern pasture for as long as Katherine had lived at the manor. Katherine knew they raised livestock, mostly sheep.
“Don’t be daft, Bertie. A sheep’s cunny is much the same as a woman’s.” Katherine didn’t immediately recognize this third voice but she assumed it was Lucy, a blond in her twenties that had been working at the estate longer than Bertie.
“And how would you know that, Luce?” This comment coming from Maggie wasn’t meant as a challenge. Lucy was known to be rather free with her feminine charms or at least that was the gossip that Katherine had heard.
Katherine rounded the corner entering the kitchen as Lucy finished her sentence, Maggie and Bertie saw her immediately but Lucy had her back turned.
“Men fuck anything that lives and breathes, as sure as the sun sets in the west. And me brothers had that bit of information, wouldn’t surprise me if it was from personal experience.”
“Morning, ladies.” Katherine entered the room nonchalantly. Maggie’s lovely complexion was turning an alarming red as she tried to stifle a giggle.
“Good morning, mum,” Bertie managed while immediately busying herself with some eggs and the usually imperturbable Lucy seemed to have a slight blush as she excused herself from the kitchen on some chore or other.
“Breakfast in the conservatory?” Maggie still hadn’t lost the flush to her face but managed the query without another giggle as Katherine made her way through the kitchen.
“Yes, Maggie. Thank you.” Katherine was known by her staff as very kind and charitable. It was when she had hired on Bertie that it was brought to her attention that some of the staff were taking liberties and that she should show a more firm manner, but it had never been her style.
Secondly I wanted to get feedback from those editors here who are familiar with the editing process and what is acceptable based on the writer's guidelines if my submission is "out of bounds" as far as content goes. The excerpt can also serve as an example of the sort of editing help I will need from a grammatical standpoint.
Finally my story is the 1st chapter of a period piece, 1940's England and I haven't really decided on a particular category, the first 4000 words would probably fit "Mature" as the protaganist is a late 30's English widow trying to find a mate, and ends up pleasuring a younger man. The next chapters aren't necessarily mature and little more than vague ideas right now.
Obviously any editors with experience in this period would be fortuitous.
Here is my excerpt, which I had questions about its suitability for Literotica. The main character catches her servants talking about bestiality commited by a neighboring lad and listens in on them:
“Oh yes, Sarah said she saw it quite clearly, as big as a horses, she did.” Katherine recognized Maggie’s voice. Maggie was quite fetching, with dark curly locks cut above the shoulder and greenish-hazel eyes. It amazed Katherine that such an innocent looking young lass could be talking this way.
“The rumor I have heard,” Katherine crept closer as the voices dropped an octave or two. “He fancies his sheep, buggers them he does!” Katherine’s eyes widened at the last part, she pegged the voice as Bertie’s. They could only be talking about Johnny Cork, son of the late William whose family had leased the northwestern pasture for as long as Katherine had lived at the manor. Katherine knew they raised livestock, mostly sheep.
“Don’t be daft, Bertie. A sheep’s cunny is much the same as a woman’s.” Katherine didn’t immediately recognize this third voice but she assumed it was Lucy, a blond in her twenties that had been working at the estate longer than Bertie.
“And how would you know that, Luce?” This comment coming from Maggie wasn’t meant as a challenge. Lucy was known to be rather free with her feminine charms or at least that was the gossip that Katherine had heard.
Katherine rounded the corner entering the kitchen as Lucy finished her sentence, Maggie and Bertie saw her immediately but Lucy had her back turned.
“Men fuck anything that lives and breathes, as sure as the sun sets in the west. And me brothers had that bit of information, wouldn’t surprise me if it was from personal experience.”
“Morning, ladies.” Katherine entered the room nonchalantly. Maggie’s lovely complexion was turning an alarming red as she tried to stifle a giggle.
“Good morning, mum,” Bertie managed while immediately busying herself with some eggs and the usually imperturbable Lucy seemed to have a slight blush as she excused herself from the kitchen on some chore or other.
“Breakfast in the conservatory?” Maggie still hadn’t lost the flush to her face but managed the query without another giggle as Katherine made her way through the kitchen.
“Yes, Maggie. Thank you.” Katherine was known by her staff as very kind and charitable. It was when she had hired on Bertie that it was brought to her attention that some of the staff were taking liberties and that she should show a more firm manner, but it had never been her style.
