First Story from Other Man's View - Feedback please

[spankedboy]

Hi. This is my first story written from the point of view of the "other man" - the man who the wife uses to cuckold the husband. Usually I write from the cuckold's point of view. I would appreciate some feedback on the plot , dialog, grammar etc.

It's called the Rickshaw Driver's Wife (Ch 01)

http://www.literotica.com/s/the-rickshaw-drivers-wife-ch-01

 

[sr71plt]

If it weren't an open-ended first chapter, I might take a look. it sounds like an interesting premise.

 

[spankedboy]

I wrote it in a way that I can extend it if needed, or leave it as is if I don't feel up to it. Although I have some ideas for the way the story will progress with such a wife. The 1-bombers make it discouraging though.