First Non-Erotic Story

[Barnaby]

Well, my first non-erotic story, BEWITCHED, BOTHERED, ETC., has just been posted and I would appreciate feedback. It's part one of a two parter and is based on a true incident from last year in which a young witch friend attempted to transfer some of her negative energy to me with unexpected results. This part is pretty much the way things actually happened but part two will be a bit exaggerated for dramatic and comic effect. I let her read it last week and she pronounced it good, saying she was surprised that I could capture her personality so well on paper.
I haven't given up on the erotic stories either as I just submitted my first Anal story which should go up this weekend. Thanks for all your support. Feedback, please!
Barnaby
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=197241