First Lesbian Sex Story

[LakotaWarrior]

Howdy,
My first attempt writing a Lesbian Sex story was just approved yesterday.

I'd appreciate any constructive comments.

Title: A Night to Remember
Author: LakotaWarrior
Section: Lesbian Sex

Thanks

 

[mellowgyrl]

Hey LakotaWarrior!

I read your story and liked it. The only thing I would say is that it felt a tad rushed. Like you were kinda eager to get to the sex (yes, I understand it's an erotic story). There was no hesitation on either parties to engage and being Kristina's first time you'd suspect she'd have just a little apprehension. Maybe its just me. Overall though I enjoyed your story! Keep writing!

 

[LadyIlsa]

Hi, I read it and left a comment. I hadn't realized that I had read a previous story you had posted. But a good effort.

 

[LakotaWarrior]

Thanks to both of you for your input.