First draft feedback?

[DesperateToBeControled]

Sorry if this isnt allowed, I couldnt find a section for it so I figured this section would be my best bet. Im hoping to get some feedback on a first draft since this will be the first thing I've posted in a while, and my first posts where so embarrassing I took them down.

 

[Jada59]

Sorry if this isnt allowed, I couldnt find a section for it so I figured this section would be my best bet. Im hoping to get some feedback on a first draft since this will be the first thing I've posted in a while, and my first posts where so embarrassing I took them down.

You can only post a little bit of the story. I think 3 paragraphs.

 

[NotWise]

Sorry if this isnt allowed, I couldnt find a section for it so I figured this section would be my best bet. Im hoping to get some feedback on a first draft since this will be the first thing I've posted in a while, and my first posts where so embarrassing I took them down.

You should take this to the Editors Forum and ask for a beta reader. Give them the category, a synopsis, and the length of the work in words.