First attempt - rather short - wouldn't mind feedback

[beautylvr]

She stared at him. He knew what for. She slowly smiled, the corners of her mouth teasingly rising as she placed a hand on the denim of his jeans in time with the rising of his pressure. Her eyes giggled at him as she felt his change, brushing the flat palm of her hand to induce more.

"Do you want me to?"

The question hung as rhetorical in the air as she unclasped his belt and let the zipper step down the length of his fly. Her eyes broke the gaze...

"Mmm."

She reached into his black briefs and withdrew a mass of heat, throbbing in anticipation.

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Kind of wondering if the tone of my writing is worth crafting an actual story...I've had a lot of adventures in my 27 years - I'd be curious if it'd be worthwhile telling the stories (with some...fictional flair for the sake of entertainment of course).

Cheers.

 

[mariescreams]

Definitely And if you want to anyway, there's no reason why not, who cares if people don't like your style of writing? But I'm sure that won't be a problem, I'd love to read more.

Good luck!

 

[beautylvr]

Thanks Marie! Perhaps I will, not sure which to start with...PM me, maybe you can help.

 

[Calypso]

I second that 'Definetly"! The little bit you've posted, makes me want to 'turn the page' to read more!!
And why not continue with what you started in your post??

 

[PurrfectMoon]

I think your on to a great start! It all flowed very nicely as I read it!

 

[nirma1230]

thank you, you are so expert in this term, keep it up

 

[LordofBlackbirds]

So far so good, keep it going.

 

[MichaelWest]

I found you just need to write and give a voice to your experiences and imagination. Once written you can revise. I enjoyed your teaser. Look forward to more.

 

[Pure]

try writing a story. post here is you like. i don't think 100 words can
be a basis of an opinion about your writing. keep up your efforts!

pure.