Finally found a minute, would like an opinion on a new story intro.

[HappySpouse]

For the first time in months, I finally have some time to write a story and catch up on the discussion boards. I've abandoned the stories I was working on before and started a new one.

I want a strong start and am hoping someone (or a couple someones) can read an 800 word intro and give me a little feedback.

It's just a couple having sex on their anniversary in a way that gives the wife an idea for how to spice up their next anniversary. Nothing too involved or kinky (yet), but I want it to be a hot start.

 

[CiaoSteve]

Happy to take a look

 

[HappySpouse]

Thank you so much. My wife has commandeered the computer for most of the day (I can’t access it on my phone), but I’ll message it to you tonight. Do you just want it pasted into a message or emailed? It’s just an intro without any special formatting.