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[KissingDragons]

I have posted two poems and have gotten only one rating per and no feed back I really want to know what you think of these.

The poems are "His Hands". And "Dream Lover"

http://www.literotica.com/p/his-hands-7

http://www.literotica.com/p/dream-lover-125

Please tell me if I'm on the right track here.

Thanks, KissingDragons

 

[Nina21]

I've never really been much of a fan of poetry so please don't take offence. I was going to be biased against it from the beginning. But both poems are very... samey.

There's nothing particularly outstanding in a literary sense, or a real difference in style that makes them stand out.

I prefer His Hands, because Dream Lover feels a little forced after a while. Rhyme for the sake of rhyme, to the point where it becomes random, for example:

"Are you a dream I long to see?
Or is it your voice saying “Wait for me.”"

And also "Are you imagined or are you real? Could I imagine this feeling I feel?" really made me cringe, I'm sorry to say.

And I think the reason you're not getting much feedback is probably because of the category, Erotic Poetry. I don't imagine it gets as many readers as the erotic stories section, and getting feedback is like getting blood out of a stone. For example one of my stories has had 12,000 views and only 59 people rated it.