Feedback wanted

[Alexandra_CD]

I hope it isn't against the rules to cross post like this, but I would be interested in feedback on the beginning of a story for the lit that I have written. I have posted the first page or so here.

Thanks much,
A

 

[Samuelx]

Very interesting story, keep at it.

 

[thawk]

Keep going

Sounds fine so far, don't stop.

 

[Alexandra_CD]

I've updated the story referred to in the OP but I haven't submitted it to the lit for publication yet. Any feedback from the target audience would be very much appreciated.

Thanks!

 

[Her sissy slave]

story?

I've updated the story referred to in the OP but I haven't submitted it to the lit for publication yet. Any feedback from the target audience would be very much appreciated.

Thanks!

ok, kick me. where's the story?