Feedback wanted on incest story

[happenstance]

Hello all,

Have written a story and would really appreciate it if you all could give me a feedback on the characters, or grammar or anything about the story. I haven't yet posted it on Literotica as I want to hear your feedback before posting it. The story can be accessed here:

CAUTION: The story revolves around an incestous relationship between mother and son, so avoid it if this doesn't appeal you.

Really look forward to hearing your view.

Thanks,
Happenstance

My other stories can be read here:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=1004372&page=submissions

 

[Dreamwalker85]

I got started on some feedback, but ran out of steam. Rest is needed, I'll give more in a few days.

If my feedback comes back like editing then I apologize. Editing is part of my job, and some habits die hard.

 

[happenstance]

I got started on some feedback, but ran out of steam. Rest is needed, I'll give more in a few days.

If my feedback comes back like editing then I apologize. Editing is part of my job, and some habits die hard.

Hello Dreamwalker85,

Thank you for reading the story and posting the suggestions, much appreciated. I've carried out all the points highlighted by you and look forward to more feedback from you.

Once again, thanks a lot for all the corrections.

Happenstance

 

[ivwiwba35]

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[PennLady]

Why do you want feedback before posting it? Stories of all types and levels of quality are posted here, and you can get feedback if you ask. This forum is for feedback on stories that have been posted to Lit, so an off-site story might not get much response.

 

[happenstance]

Why do you want feedback before posting it? Stories of all types and levels of quality are posted here, and you can get feedback if you ask. This forum is for feedback on stories that have been posted to Lit, so an off-site story might not get much response.

I have requested feedback before posting the story because I want to make the corrections and changes and then post the finished story instead of making the corrections and re-posting it. I think this is a better way, but could be wrong

 

[happenstance]

Have deleted the link

Hello all,

Have deleted the link because the story is now on Literotica site. Thank you all for helping me with your feedback, much appreciated.

Happenstance

 

[sr71plt]

Hello all,

Have deleted the link because the story is now on Literotica site. Thank you all for helping me with your feedback, much appreciated.

Happenstance

Why don't you give the Literotica link to help us lazy people get to it?

 

[chocolatecookie3]

I also don't see the story on your page. Can you repost the link?