Feedback requested...

[ErosArtist]

Hello all -

Lit has published my first two stories. Here are the links:

Summertime Blues, the story of a young lawn boy seduced by an older neighbor, and;

Stalled, a story of unexpected seduction when a young couple are stranded on a lonely roadside.

Any all constructive feedback is appreciated.

After a read, I feel there are issues in the flow. I think this is mostly a function of how Lit lays out the paragraph breaks and pages. I'll be grateful for suggestions on how to deal with this in future submissions.

Thanks in advance!

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

Hey ErosArtist, it is very hard to read those stories with them laid out the way they are. When you submitted the work, did you copy/paste or did you upload the file? When you were writing how many returns (enters) did you make after sentences, or paragraphs? This may have effected how your story loaded up to the sight. If you'd like to send me one of the stories via email, I can take a look at it for you and try to see why your work may have uploaded the way it is appearing.

I'd like to read them and give an honest opinion, but unfortunately it is very hard to enjoy so if I can help you with the spacing issues, you can resubmit the story as an edited piece. You shouldn't lose any comments/votes either.

Feel free to PM me and I'll toss you back my email.

~ Red

 

[ErosArtist]

Hey ErosArtist, it is very hard to read those stories with them laid out the way they are. When you submitted the work, did you copy/paste or did you upload the file? When you were writing how many returns (enters) did you make after sentences, or paragraphs? This may have effected how your story loaded up to the sight. If you'd like to send me one of the stories via email, I can take a look at it for you and try to see why your work may have uploaded the way it is appearing.

I'd like to read them and give an honest opinion, but unfortunately it is very hard to enjoy so if I can help you with the spacing issues, you can resubmit the story as an edited piece. You shouldn't lose any comments/votes either.

Feel free to PM me and I'll toss you back my email.

~ Red

Thanks - and it is a spacing issue exactly as you described, of my own doing. When I saw them and was wondering why they loaded that way (cut & paste Word doc), it hit me returns/tabs were the problem. A look at the Word file confirmed it

Lesson learned. Next time will be smoother...and I may do a re-submit of these.

Thanks!

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

Thanks - and it is a spacing issue exactly as you described, of my own doing. When I saw them and was wondering why they loaded that way (cut & paste Word doc), it hit me returns/tabs were the problem. A look at the Word file confirmed it

Lesson learned. Next time will be smoother...and I may do a re-submit of these.

Thanks!

Re-submitting is very simple, there are ways to do so in the FAQ section of the story board. Good luck with your future stories.

 

[ErosArtist]

...and I've noticed typos that I never caught in all my proofs of the original. Funny how that happens.