Feedback request;" The Vacation House" series

[1Puck1]

I am asking for constructive feedback about the series I have been posting. The series is titled The Vacation House. To date there are 20 chapters posted here on Literotica.

I had received some good email contacts during the writing of the series, most of which where very positive and encouraging. Also, most of them noted my total lack of control of punctuation as well as a whole slew of typo's. I have tried to become better at recognizing these problem issues and hope that they have at least lessened over time.

Unfortunately a very few of those who had previously emailed me have now become a bit harsh with their comments. I really hope that I have not caused them to become irate with my writing. I hope that the members from this site can point me in the right direction regarding the content and writing style. I am already aware that I need to learn to be a better proof reader, that will be obvious I am sure.

Thank you very much in advance for your consideration and time.

Sincerely,
1puck1

PS. for comparison of possible growth or lack there of;

The Vacation House Chapter 1
https://www.literotica.com/s/the-vacation-house-ch-1

The Vacation House Chapter 20
https://www.literotica.com/s/the-vacation-house-ch-20

 

[1Puck1]

Should I or should I not?

I have received two separate suggestions and critiques today regarding the entire "The Vacation House" series.

As has been pointed out to me on many occasions since starting this saga, I really have problems with punctuation, tense and the excessive number of typo's.

It has been strongly suggested that I simply remove the entire series and see if I can do a better job of editing the many errors, then repost the series when I feel that I can do no better job of self editing.

My question is this;

Should I do as suggested, remove the entire series and try to do a better job of editing the whole kit and caboodle?

Does anyone have any suggestions as to who might be able to help edit this mess I have created?

Thank you all for your help and guidance, it has been an honor and a pleasure to try to learn to be a better writer and person.

Sincerely,
1puck1

 

[blin18]

I just today received an email from a reader with a suggestion that I intend to look into. He recommended read-aloud software - just listen to your own story and you'll probably hear the things that sound dodgy or don't work.

However, since writing the story prompting that feedback, I've started using two kind readers as proofers, and they catch a lot of stuff I miss. They also provide constructive feedback on the story, which is something the read aloud software won't do.

If any of your readers have praised your story as well as providing criticism/corrections, then they might be good candidates for proof readers. It can't hurt to ask. I haven't read your story, but its probably impolite to give really rough copy to a proof reader; read it at least twice yourself - carefully! - before you send it to them.

I'm not so sure about deleting and reposting. I think people might get upset if an 'old' story reappears in the new lists. Maybe it would be better to edit the existing submissions.

 

[sr71plt]

I'm from the "learn from it and move on" school. This isn't the New Yorker (and there's no such thing as perfect copy).

 

[Areala-chan]

I agree with sr71's suggestion to learn from it and move on, but I think your circumstances might warrant something different since we're talking about a twenty-part series and not just a three-page one-shot. If you want to capture someone's attention and keep it over the course of multiple installments, you'll want the first part to be as good as you can get it.

Since it never hurts to give a story one more pass, go over part one to fix the most egregious errors and see if you start getting different responses in your comments. If you do, and you like what they're saying, invest the effort to do the other parts.

If you don't see any difference in the comments you get, or don't feel it was worth the effort, then ignore the rest, know you've done some good practice editing, and apply what you've learned to the next thing you write.

*huggles*
Areala-chan

 

[1Puck1]

Thank you!

Thank you very much for the excellent advice. There is so much I need to learn, thankful in the knowledge that there are those who are willing to guide someone such as myself in the right direction.

I have taken the advice to simply read the first chapter over and over. I have found so many errors in continuity as well as a massive amount of typo's.

An edit has been made and hopefully will not make anyone's eyes bleed any more than I have caused to date. I know that redwoods and I have a great deal in common, I had no idea we could edit once posted. Thank you so much for knocking this young block. I actually did not realize the forums existed until another site member sent me a scathing email, telling me that I am ignorant kid for not using the forums.

Duh!

Be well, be happy.

Sincerely,
1puck1