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Need feedback please. This is part of my novel. It's the only erotic part. Leah, the main female character is thinking about her current boyfriend and back over her sexual past. If there are typos, don't worry.
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In the two weeks that followed at Sac University, they couldn't keep their hands off each other. Anytime they could, they would have sex; before lectures, after lectures, all night long, everywhere, anytime. She even started going knickerless to lectures so Kirk could drop books to the floor and look at her. He even tapped another student on the shoulder and held her legs wide enough for the guy to see. Kirk wasn’t her first lover. She was a virgin until her final year of high school. She'd once seen her older sister riding her boyfriend on the loungeroom floor and she'd tried to see his penis but she'd bumped into something and they'd covered up. She'd kissed. Oh, yes she'd kissed for hours and hours in cars with some of the football players from her year. Most of their hands went straight for her crotch and those boys went home frustrated. Eventually, it was Paul, the Quarter-Back, and his tongue searching her mouth that drove her insane for more. When his hands went to her breasts, she didn't brush it away. His mouth went to her nipple. That was the key. Her legs fell open his fingers slid past her wet knickers and into her. When she asked him to show her his penis, he didn't hesitate. It was enormous. She remembered gasping as he mounted her and, even as the head of his cock entered her, he groaned and came. They both got into the back seat and within minutes he was hard again. Still slippery, she mounted him. This time, she put her fingers at the base of his cock and felt the sperm start to pump along the shaft. She pulled it out and watched it spurt. She loved seeing that. After Paul, the lucky boys were the ones who took it slow and felt her breasts. If they did that, they would get into the back seat where she would mount them, sitting astride with her nipples level with their mouths. As soon as the groaning started, she’d roll off and watch them spurt. When she went onto the pill, she let all the lucky boys come inside her. Then her favorite, Paul, reappeared and taught her to swallow sperm. Oh, she loved doing that too. She'd tried to keep count the number of times she did it with different guys but lost track. Sometimes she did it several times with the same guy, sometimes several cocks at the same time. She loved them all. That's what really turned Kirk on while they were fucking. She would whisper in his ear and tell him about the short, thick cocks, the skinny cocks, the huge cocks, the hairy Italian cocks that had come in her cunt, about the sperm that had dripped past her anus and about the cocks that her luscious full lips had licked clean. Invariably, as Kirk approached climax, he would ask her if she thought any sperm went into her anus. When she said yes, he couldn't hold back. It was always his greatest cum.
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Need feedback please. This is part of my novel. It's the only erotic part. Leah, the main female character is thinking about her current boyfriend and back over her sexual past. If there are typos, don't worry.
Start
In the two weeks that followed at Sac University, they couldn't keep their hands off each other. Anytime they could, they would have sex; before lectures, after lectures, all night long, everywhere, anytime. She even started going knickerless to lectures so Kirk could drop books to the floor and look at her. He even tapped another student on the shoulder and held her legs wide enough for the guy to see. Kirk wasn’t her first lover. She was a virgin until her final year of high school. She'd once seen her older sister riding her boyfriend on the loungeroom floor and she'd tried to see his penis but she'd bumped into something and they'd covered up. She'd kissed. Oh, yes she'd kissed for hours and hours in cars with some of the football players from her year. Most of their hands went straight for her crotch and those boys went home frustrated. Eventually, it was Paul, the Quarter-Back, and his tongue searching her mouth that drove her insane for more. When his hands went to her breasts, she didn't brush it away. His mouth went to her nipple. That was the key. Her legs fell open his fingers slid past her wet knickers and into her. When she asked him to show her his penis, he didn't hesitate. It was enormous. She remembered gasping as he mounted her and, even as the head of his cock entered her, he groaned and came. They both got into the back seat and within minutes he was hard again. Still slippery, she mounted him. This time, she put her fingers at the base of his cock and felt the sperm start to pump along the shaft. She pulled it out and watched it spurt. She loved seeing that. After Paul, the lucky boys were the ones who took it slow and felt her breasts. If they did that, they would get into the back seat where she would mount them, sitting astride with her nipples level with their mouths. As soon as the groaning started, she’d roll off and watch them spurt. When she went onto the pill, she let all the lucky boys come inside her. Then her favorite, Paul, reappeared and taught her to swallow sperm. Oh, she loved doing that too. She'd tried to keep count the number of times she did it with different guys but lost track. Sometimes she did it several times with the same guy, sometimes several cocks at the same time. She loved them all. That's what really turned Kirk on while they were fucking. She would whisper in his ear and tell him about the short, thick cocks, the skinny cocks, the huge cocks, the hairy Italian cocks that had come in her cunt, about the sperm that had dripped past her anus and about the cocks that her luscious full lips had licked clean. Invariably, as Kirk approached climax, he would ask her if she thought any sperm went into her anus. When she said yes, he couldn't hold back. It was always his greatest cum.
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