Feedback... Please? Non-Erotic

[Dillinger]

I've posted my first non-erotic stories to Literotica... there are three of them - they are "short shorts" - all less then a page in length.

I figure the non-erotic section doesn't get as much attention as the others so, I'm curious, what people might think of them?

Contact

Jed


Queen Of The Gypsies

Thanks! *smile*

 

[BrainyBeauty]

"I liked Contact," she said. "This is the dawning of the Age of Aquarius," he proclaimed. "I think it was too short," she complained. "You never promised me a rose garden," he shouted. "It left me wanting...more" she cried!

This was the writer's life. He wrote. She read. He pleaded. She obliged. He still wanted more. So did she.

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I came and listened to your story 'bout Jed
The poor tale left me just shaking my head

You may disagree with my critique and call me a boob
But it was different and now I wonder if YOU are the droob?
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Queen of the Gypsies was most descriptive and original. Made me want to view her from behind a two way mirror and observe her eccentricities.

 

[Dillinger]

Thank you... I really appreciate the feedback AND the creative way you provided it! *smile*

In show business they say always leave them wanting more. Perhaps its not too bad a thing in a short story as well. Though maybe I should consider extending them?

I kind of like the idea of writing a few hundred short shorts instead a few "long shorts." Kind of a barrage of ideas - vignettes, in a way... Slices of life.

 

[nitengale]

I think BB secretly works for Hallmark!

 

[Dillinger]

She dos have a gift, doesn't she?