Feedback on stories

[Guest]

I currently have two stories on the site, they are in the "new" section and would like to hear some "constructive" critisism about them. One is "Lacey" and the other is "The party is over". What I am looking for is ways to make my writing better. Any help would be appreciated.

 

[Romeo]

Just wanted to let you know, I read the story "After the Party", and had to say THANK-YOU!! When nobody replied to my story idea, I thought I'd never see it. When I stumbled upon the story, I was not only surprised you made me a part of it, but even more so, the writing was terrific!! Thanks again!

 

[Guest]

Romeo, thanks I thought you might like to be part of the action. The reason I didn't respond was it wasn't quite like you wanted. I did not include where the girl was going to get in trouble for being late so I didn't want you to be dissapointed. But I am glad you liked it!

 

[CJT]

The stories have now moved to their categories. Lacey is in the Non-consent section and the Party is over is in the Group Sex section. Please let me know and watch for some new stuff I hope they put up soon.