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[togitc]

The series I am working on Family Vacation already has three parts. The third is the most popular. I was wondering if someone could tell me how to make the rest of the series even better. Here are links to Parts 1-3

Part 1
Part 2
Part 3

Be as brutal as you want. It is hard to learn without knowing where I went wrong.

And for those who haven't figured it out, it is Incest/Taboo.

 

[Canuck3700]

Great series. Excited for part 4.

 

[AsylumSeeker]

The Truth, And Nothing But The Truth

I read part 3. The dialogue seemed too stiff and forced, not free-flowing and realistic. There are some minor grammatical errors that can be fixed via editing. Dialogue is so vital to a believable story. It needs to sound natural. And you'll ask how, and I can't tell you. Not that I won't but when I write it's like I hear voices in my head, I imagine a conversation and it simply comes out that way.

If you're interested I'll help you if you want.

 

[togitc]

Thanks. I'm getting a bit tired of the series to be honest. I had it all planned out, but now I'm just...eh, you know?

I'm done writing I/T stuff, I'm out of good ideas. I have ideas, they have just been done over and over and over. I don't want that to happen to this series and that is where I see it.

I plan to write maybe two or three more and close the series. Maybe do a sequal that happens a few years later, if the idea is good, maybe even a non-ero.

I should be asleep.