Feedback on my story/series?

[whitebottom1000]

Hello! I am looking to improve as a writer and was wondering if you could provide any feedback on how to improve my writing?

Whether it’s tips on character, setting, or tension building, I’d love to hear it!

I wrote mostly gay stories with some femdom fetish erotica.

This story series is a gay erotic tale and my most recent post, but if you look at any other posts I’m open to feedback there too!

https://www.literotica.com/s/young-man-1

https://www.literotica.com/s/young-man-pt-02

https://www.literotica.com/s/young-man-pt-03

https://www.literotica.com/s/young-man-pt-04

https://www.literotica.com/s/young-man-pt-05

Thank you in advance!