Feedback on my story/blog.

[BellaIsabella]

Hey everyone, just wondering if you could give me some feedback on a story I have written in blog, I do a lot of erotica, with a humorous twist that is pulled from real life, also please excuse my crappy grammer, its not my strong suit and sorely need an editor and or good word processor.

http://bellaisabella15.wordpress.com/

 

[Toqueme]

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[Hotcappucino]

Technically, you're not supposed to use this forum to promote another site. One of the reasons is to prevent people from making posts just to increase page hits for their site.

What you should do, perhaps, is submit your story to Literotica, wait for it to be accepted, then ask readers to review it here.

 

[SubTrainer]

Really like your "Frenchman" post. Very sensual. You've got a very natural, conversational writing style. "Two pairs of ..." was very nice, gave me a nice image. Will read more in days ahead.

 

[LulaBlue]

I started reading, and got really into it, spending time I was supposed to be ah, working, reading your posts. There's something really compelling in what you're writing, no doubt.

However, I agree with your self-assessment on grammar/editing issues. I found myself reading things, but mentally copyediting as I went along.

Bearing in mind what Hotcappucino says above me -- the issue of promoting another site -- if you were to write and submit work on Literotica, I'd surely read it, having read this. Heck, if you wanted editing, I'd volunteer to help (following whatever protocol the site has set up for that, and if you felt I were capable of editing), because I do like your writing.