Feedback on Halloween-Themed Story

[RaLaWrites]

Hello, all.

Before I continue, I should share things that I already know. There are syntax errors and I repeat words in a single sentence a few times. For example:

"Whoa," said a man who stood nearby who held hands with a woman. "Did you hear those screams?"

Needless to say it's nagging at me but I know it exists.

If there are any mispellings or anything like that, please let me know. Other than that, I just want to know if this is a good, light-hearted story. The story is very plain and straight to the point. I'd almost describe it as cute.

Here's the link:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=385770


Thanks!

 

[tickledkitty]

If you're entering this one in the contest, how is it posted already?

 

[RaLaWrites]

Uh oh. That's a good question. I guess I submit the story too early.

If anyone would be so kind as to tell me how I can fix it, that would be appreciated. If not, I'll just write a brand new story.

I'd still like feedback for this one, though!

 

[tickledkitty]

Uh oh. That's a good question. I guess I submit the story too early.

If anyone would be so kind as to tell me how I can fix it, that would be appreciated. If not, I'll just write a brand new story.

I'd still like feedback for this one, though!

It's fine to submit early, but you have to specify in that little notes box that it's an entry for the Halloween contest. I would suggest PMing Laurel at this point. You've still got a few days to get it straightened out. Good luck.

 

[RaLaWrites]

Thanks, tickedkitty! I guess someone saw this thread so they automatically took it off and re-posted it today.

The above link works now, for those who tried clicking when it was pending.

I have a question: My story currently has 70 votes and has a score of 4.16. Does this mean more than a few people gave my story 1's or 2's? Or do I have to wait for the sweep?