Feedback on Frightful Night's Delight?

[Texguy84]

Howdy all, I was wondering if folks could take a look at my Frightful Night's Delight series and give me any feedback on ways you think I can improve them. So far I've gotten rather solid compliments, but I feel I can do better somehow.

So any ideas, criticism, nits to pick, etc. feel free and I'll apprecate it.

Chapter 1
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=169560
Chapter 2
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=170801
Chapter 3
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=175312
Chapter 4
http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=176599

Thanks in advance for any feedback.