staceyshackleton
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Hi all,
I'm a relatively new author, and I've just submitted the fourth story in my first series: Dress Off.
http://www.literotica.com/s/dress-off-4-the-rescue-of-tess
For those reading the fourth story first, the basic back story is that an organisation called Decider Enterprises recruits women through embarrassed-naked-female scenarios (games called "Dress Off"). Decider Enterprises are gradually being revealed to also deal in espionage and other spy activities, generally for "the good guys". One of their top agents (Tess Trueheart) has been captured by an old foe (Harrington), and two newer agents have been sent to rescue her. The third story ends with the would-be rescuers stripped naked in Vancouver, and trying to follow their only lead to Tess' current location through the streets, while enduring a cold winter night. The fourth story starts off with another Dress Off -like game, and then returns to the main story line...
I'd love to have any honest feedback on aspects such as pacing and story construction (or any other issues you can think of).
I've put this in exhibitionist/voyeur, although it's more embarrassed-naked-female, with a few minor aspects of mind control (but that's not the main focus, hence why it isn't in that category).
Thanks in advance,
EC.
I'm a relatively new author, and I've just submitted the fourth story in my first series: Dress Off.
http://www.literotica.com/s/dress-off-4-the-rescue-of-tess
For those reading the fourth story first, the basic back story is that an organisation called Decider Enterprises recruits women through embarrassed-naked-female scenarios (games called "Dress Off"). Decider Enterprises are gradually being revealed to also deal in espionage and other spy activities, generally for "the good guys". One of their top agents (Tess Trueheart) has been captured by an old foe (Harrington), and two newer agents have been sent to rescue her. The third story ends with the would-be rescuers stripped naked in Vancouver, and trying to follow their only lead to Tess' current location through the streets, while enduring a cold winter night. The fourth story starts off with another Dress Off -like game, and then returns to the main story line...
I'd love to have any honest feedback on aspects such as pacing and story construction (or any other issues you can think of).
I've put this in exhibitionist/voyeur, although it's more embarrassed-naked-female, with a few minor aspects of mind control (but that's not the main focus, hence why it isn't in that category).
Thanks in advance,
EC.
