Feedback (Interracial)

[neelu18]

Feedback

Refined Adjustments is an Interracial story about a student and professor. It's actually the first story I decided to put up and I would like some feedback.

http://www.literotica.com/s/refined-adjustments-ch-01

Thanks!

 

[robertreams]

Not bad, not very exciting though. Also lots of this, that, they, it, them, he, she, (loose pronouns rolling around on the floor like spilled marbles), really difficult to walk across to the meaning.