Feedback for Something Out of My Ordinary?

[bashfullyshameless]

So my story for the Nude Day contest just went up. It's outside my usual offerings on this site.

http://www.literotica.com/s/freedom-through-faith

I'd love to have some feedback on it mainly because it's outside of my norm. I usually do sci-fi/fantasy, and while this has a slight supernatural/fantasy edge to it, mostly that's just a premise for why everyone is so hot and horny and has such stamina. (Obviously hotness & stamina are common in erotica; I just like having something to justify it.)

At any rate, this one has much more sex than my usual fare. There aren't any gunshots, stabbings or people being kicked in the face. There isn't even a single humiliated vampire. It's a little more "sex story" and a little less "story that includes lots of sex" than my typical stuff. At the risk of shamelessly plugging my work during a contest, I'd be happy to hear what people think of it.

Thanks!

 

[estragon]

Left a public comment to your story, and sent quibbles via "Send Feedback". Nice story, and Amber is a character I'd like to read more about. Scott is less engaging, and his parents make it somewhat difficult for me to suspend belief, but I managed it. Julia is one hot lady, though. The story kept my interest through all 9 pages, and that says a lot.