Feedback for my 1st story "Getting Reaquainted"

[medjay]

Hello all,

I posted my first story "Getting Reaquainted" a few days ago. I recieved one positive e-mail response but I'm still curious about what people think. The votes have been pretty good but those are kind of faceless and impersonal. This was my first erotic story and I just want to make sure it's sexy to everyone's satisfaction.

http://literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=42181

Thanks,
Medjay

 

[p_p_man]

Exhaustion isn't the word for it!

That's the best piece of erotic literature I've read in a long while.

Everything is right. From the way you characterise as you tell the story and not in the usual "list" style at the beginning; to the magnificent long, long sex act which had me almost reading it with my nose against the screen!

Your descriptive phrases are truly descriptive and not used as a link to rush from one sex scene to another as quickly as possible and the whole unrushed style made it a pleasure to read.

I won't say anything here, it may spoil other peoples' enjoyment, but I expected a different ending. The way you finished it made it perfect for me.

Is this your first story or your first erotic story?

I would place you as an author of some considerable skill and experience.

I gave it a 5.

Nice one...

 

[medjay]

Thanks a lot. I've actually been writing since I was twelve but this is my first attempt at an erotic story. I wasn't too sure about it at first because I just lifted details from one of my personal experiences and wrote it in less than two hours. I thought it was more funny than it was sexy but who knows? I guess I'm on the right track here so I'll try writing a few more.

 

[Impetus]

Nice story.

I'll admit that I'm usually more interested in stories that have a little bit more 'unique' to them. The story was very well-written, and you pulled everything off really well, but the setting was a little to 'normal' for my tastes. Like this is the kind of story that might happen a hundred or a thousand times a day. I'm more interested in hearing about unique stories, ones that are intriguging in their singularity. But then again, that's just me.

Setting aside, though, stellar story. Well written, way sexy, and nicely descriptieve. You pulled the whole thing off very well. Nice story. I'm impressed.

-I

 

[medjay]

Thanks for the feedback. I was thinking the same thing about the setting of the story. I'm writing one now with a sci-fi fantasy theme so it should be a little different. I look forward to seeing what you all think about it. Meanwhile, the positive feedback is encouraging and my creative juices are flowing.

Thanks everybody!

 

[medjay]

I still haven't heard from any of the ladies out there. Don't be shy.

 

[Flashlight7.5]

Good, but...

Good stuff. The sex scene is nicely done and conveys the heat of the moment well. My only "complaint" is that there is no third act to this story. It's okay to leave readers hanging and wanting for more (I do it in my stories quite often), but this story just seems to...end. There's not much for the reader to grab onto apart from the "I'll call you." at the end.

 

[PrincessKatie]

Descriptions are very in and out with no depth or substance at all.
Locations were limited and maybe the story could have been more expansive-maybe it's just a bad day 4 me

Conclusion=Seen Better.