Feedback for an Ongoing Series

[barebacknubianf]

I'd like some feedback on two stories I've written that I hope to make an ongoing series. They are called Uncle Karl (Chapter One and Chapter Two) and they were written some years apart, so I think maybe the tone in the two is slightly different. That's to be expected.

Anyway, if you'd be so kind, I'd love to know what people think of my writing and what I can make better.

 

[usedsandi]

Uncle Karl

Read both the Uncle Karl stories and got turn on by both .....I am not an expert in prose but thoroughly enjoyed the theme and action . Have experiene a LOT similar ....my Step Father and his brother. In each case they were a lot cruder and more dominant than Karl , but that was OK as I am sub to both older men and older women .