Feedback appreciated

[MoicaneHashEmporium]

I’ve been publishing a series of stories under the title “Oral Fixations” which is a surreal southern gothic flavored story about a college age man staying with his Dad’s old college girlfriend turned family friend in a small college town in Mississippi for the summer. The story incorporates mystery, supernatural themes, taboo adjacent subjects, food fetish, and group sex/love triangle considerations. I’ve taken a liking to the story and I’m thinking about pushing it into a novella or a novel. But I’d like to get some feedback about the idea. As it stands, I think I could write another 30 or 40k words in this universe easily, but I also don’t have any idea whether it will resonate. Early chapters seem to have received positive feedback, but those chapters were also the least story rich, and were originally intended to be stand alone rather than part of something bigger. Thanks in advance.

 

[darwin1859]

I’ve been publishing a series of stories under the title “Oral Fixations” which is a surreal southern gothic flavored story about a college age man staying with his Dad’s old college girlfriend turned family friend in a small college town in Mississippi for the summer. The story incorporates mystery, supernatural themes, taboo adjacent subjects, food fetish, and group sex/love triangle considerations. I’ve taken a liking to the story and I’m thinking about pushing it into a novella or a novel. But I’d like to get some feedback about the idea. As it stands, I think I could write another 30 or 40k words in this universe easily, but I also don’t have any idea whether it will resonate. Early chapters seem to have received positive feedback, but those chapters were also the least story rich, and were originally intended to be stand alone rather than part of something bigger. Thanks in advance.

I read part 1, and I don't understand the question. You're into this story (https://www.literotica.com/s/oral-fixations-1) and you have extremely high ratings.

You should go for it.

I think the only question is how well you can structure a longer narrative. I'll bet you will do just fine. I do suggest that you find an editor and let them polish your writing. There were trivial issues and errors that were a little annoying to me. If you haven't already, I'd also flesh out the background (you know, write character sketches, decide on arcs for each major character) and plot out the way the story will build to a climax.

Also, I believe your intentions, but part 1 didn't seem particularly "surreal southern gothic flavored." I could have seen that set in Arizona, Maine on a hot day, etc. You might need to "south-it-up" (foods, drinks, drawls, expressions, etc.). I don't think you're clear whether the narrator is from the south. Aunt Lilly might love him regardless, but he'd be a bit fish-out-of-water if he didn't grow up there and southerners would be polite but would see him as an outsider.