Feedback and questions on "Heartbreak"

Shroud21

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http://www.literotica.com/s/heartbreak-4

I was sitting in my kitchen, late one evening making one of my gross protein shakes when the final scene this story hit me, suddenly and hard. I really felt it deep, and included it in this story. I feel like I could have done a better job getting the emotions across, but I'd like you to have a look and see what you think.

Thanks :)

-Shroud
 
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