Feed me, feed me! please.

[Carl East]

Any chance of feedback for a new tale of mine, it's called "Catching more than fish" and is a romance, or supposed to be.

I'll leave a link, thanks guys/gals.

Carl

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=59249

 

[the_bragis]

Catch of the day Carl.

Hi Carl,

You know, as I was reading your story I suddenly realised who your picture reminds me of...Jeromy Irons. You know the British actor? I think it's the eyes... yes it's the eyes for sure. Females can do that you know? Think about two or more things at the same time. It's a biological fact. Men of course can't, but I'm sure they have other talents...

Now, back to your story. Well in many parts, to me anyway, it didn't really feel like a story as such. It felt more like I was reading pages from your diary. Oh, and please I'm not knocking that.

This is a wonderfully sensual, and romantic read. It's very well written too. I know some people may think you haven't included enough background detail, but I don't' think this particular piece needs it.

I have to tell you fishing isn't the sexiest pastime I could have thought of, but you did paint a lovely picture of the lake and surrounds. You feeling netted was an interesting analogy to use too. In fact the whole piece was about the art of catching something wasn't it?

You know what else? It's was interesting to read your dialog.. I don't know if others would have found this so, but I felt it was very 'British'. I could almost hear the accent, lines like : "“Beautifully caught by the way,”, and “I’ve rather enjoyed your company as well…” doesn't that just sound deliciously British? So proper and well mannered. A jolly good effort there old man!

This is completely different from the last story of yours I read, but it's just as good. Although I did feel the ending in this one fell away and was just a little flat. Other readers however may disagree.

(Oh, I did spot a 'Judies' that should have been 'Judy's'.)

Those are my thoughts.

Have a great day,

Alex(fem)

 

[Carl East]

Thank you so much Alex, your feedback was appreciated.

Carl