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[BedtimeStories77]

Yes, this is a story idea thread, I swear! I need to get some more ideas as I'm working on my long awaited sequel to Debra's Secret Life. I'll even give sneak peeks into chapter two so far if you want.

To give some basics, the first chapter is centered around Debra Barone and a fictional (as in, not even from the show) character. I've set up some hints that she knew the man from before but haven't offered up too much about him yet.

Seriously, I need people who have read the first chapter (or simply enthusiasts of the show to read Ch 1 now) before I can continue otherwise my question I have for chapter two will be confusing.

My question is about the direction I should take with the second chapter and if it would be "too busy" to add the element I was thinking of.



So, please post if you've read the story and/or are a fan of the show!!

 

[Normal_Person]

I'm a huge fan of Debra!

 

[BedtimeStories77]

So, does that mean you've read my story?

 

[bareman]

and the question is???

Hi Eve--

Just read your story...well-written and hot. I always wondered about the casting for that show. Ray's too much of a weenie to attract a hottie like Debra. So...fire away with your question(s).

Bareman

 

[BedtimeStories77]

Hi. Glad you enjoyed the first chapter. I'm wondering if a slight "non consent" group thing done to Debra initiated by the main male character would be "too busy" in the story since I plan to have a blackmail aspect by a different character as well.

 

[bareman]

hmmm...

Hi. Glad you enjoyed the first chapter. I'm wondering if a slight "non consent" group thing done to Debra initiated by the main male character would be "too busy" in the story since I plan to have a blackmail aspect by a different character as well.

well, now..."slight non-consent group thing" sounds like an oxymoron...lol. But it could be the basis of said blackmail. Wouldn't want Ray to find out what a depraved gang bang slut his wife is turning out to be, at the same time he has to beg for pussy? Lots of possibilities here. Have fun with this one!

 

[BedtimeStories77]

The blackmail will come about because a member of Ray's family did discover Debra's secret. "Slight non consent" is a rather oxymoron as you said, but seems to be the Lit version of rape and I'm not sure if hardcore rape is allowed in the Celeb category anyway. Besides, it would be her friend that set it up as a slight revenge thing for having his feelings hurt. He doesn't want it to be hardcore rape, etc.

 

[ravensfx]

Great Story

Debra was definitely the one a lot of men liked.