The Huntsman
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- Joined
- May 1, 2002
- Posts
- 58
Goodmorning!
I see that all of my submissions have been posted to the site, and very pleased am I! There is something final about reading a poem on this site; it lends a "new eye" to an old situation, and reveals the flaws or excellencies of a work. And of course it surrenders the babe to the waters.
This poem is about self-destruction. It is a theory about the origin of gendered humans, and what wrong thoughts arrived us as we find ourselves today. It is about the dual parts of each human - the fact that we think in two's in the first place - and how we might unconsciously starve and cripple the feminine healing hand of our psyche.
It is about the Fracturing of the universe - Self apart from Other, human apart from G*d, colors splintered from the Light, the millions of fragment words devised to sublime the original Word. It imagines a state of awareness that was before Time, before Death, before pain and clarity of Mind. It imagines humanity before we separated ourselves into man and woman - or rather, before we ascribed values and judgements to our differences.
It remembers the first dance, when the world was green. And then the desire of one of the dancers to Lead, and how this broke the spell and threw our morning into the sharp defining light of afternoon.
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=46944
I think these terms should be spelled out.
Gennesara - "first water," or "where the mountains [bend] to drink"
Shélomaya - "sound of song"
Thank you for your advise and consideration! I will make sure to help others with construction!
Ihmara
I see that all of my submissions have been posted to the site, and very pleased am I! There is something final about reading a poem on this site; it lends a "new eye" to an old situation, and reveals the flaws or excellencies of a work. And of course it surrenders the babe to the waters.
This poem is about self-destruction. It is a theory about the origin of gendered humans, and what wrong thoughts arrived us as we find ourselves today. It is about the dual parts of each human - the fact that we think in two's in the first place - and how we might unconsciously starve and cripple the feminine healing hand of our psyche.
It is about the Fracturing of the universe - Self apart from Other, human apart from G*d, colors splintered from the Light, the millions of fragment words devised to sublime the original Word. It imagines a state of awareness that was before Time, before Death, before pain and clarity of Mind. It imagines humanity before we separated ourselves into man and woman - or rather, before we ascribed values and judgements to our differences.
It remembers the first dance, when the world was green. And then the desire of one of the dancers to Lead, and how this broke the spell and threw our morning into the sharp defining light of afternoon.
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=46944
I think these terms should be spelled out.
Gennesara - "first water," or "where the mountains [bend] to drink"
Shélomaya - "sound of song"
Thank you for your advise and consideration! I will make sure to help others with construction!
Ihmara
