Experienced Lesbians Wanted

[klvyoenne]

Experienced Lesbians Wanted!
It was suggested that I post these questions here.

Recently I started a storyline titled, "Learning the Dance" on which I would like your comments and feedback. http://english.literotica.com:81/st...age=submissions

Christy, a womanling, begins learning about her sexuality from Gloria, a coworker and friend. It's not intended to be a stroke & cum, but perhaps the start of something more, eposodic? My main goal is believability and realism.

My biggest challenge: I am not now, nor have I ever been in a lesbian relationship. Please, those of you with more experience in this category than I, lend me your wisdom.

What I really seek is realism in the story. I want to know if I'm on the right track with my story, Learning the Dance. I ask, are these really things that two women would do? Is the story on the right track as far as an obviously experienced woman who'se seducing a virgin (metaphorically and actually)? Are the expressions believable? Things like that. Also are the converasations realistic?

I guess the biggest question is, when you read the story, are you drawn into it? Do you find yourself skipping over parts, or are you actually interested in the characters and the action? Do you want to read more?

Klvyoenne
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[Jenny_Jackson]

Experienced Lesbians Wanted!
Are the expressions believable? Things like that. Also are the converasations realistic?

I guess the biggest question is, when you read the story, are you drawn into it? Do you find yourself skipping over parts, or are you actually interested in the characters and the action? Do you want to read more?

Klvyoenne

First of all, I'm BI not lesbian. I do, however, have a number of lesbian friends and a lesbian lover. So I think I'm qualified to answer your questions.

1) Are the Expressions and Conversations Believable? Let me put it this way. You are a woman. Did you believe them? Lesbian and Bi women are just like women everywhere. There isn't much difference other than their sexual preference. If you had a conversation with another Heterosexual woman would that conversation be any different if she were a Lesbian? I think not.

2) Do you skip over parts? Yes, but if I find myself doing so, it's usually because the story isn't very interesting and I stop and go on to another story.

3) Are you actually interested in Character Development and Plot? Yes. If there is minimal or no character development or the plot is fuzzy, nonexistant and stupid I quit reading.

4) Which is more important, Story Development or Action? That's hard to answer. If you are writing a "stroke" story then it's action. If you are writing anything else then Story Development. Frankly, even in a stroke story if the story development is crap you ain't going to get many reads or votes.

Hope that helps.

JJ

 

[lance gt]

another viewpoint

Hi Klvyoenne, Although I am a male, I have several bi women friends. I like to write in the lesbian category and I understand your need to be real about your characters. As JJ has pointed out, try to imagine yourself as the woman in your story and what it is that is said to her to get her to try it with another woman. You don't have to become her, just imagine it. If it brings you to a state of realism in the progress of seduction, you are on the right track. I wrote a story called, "In Search of the Big 'O'", it chronicles the meeting of two hetero women and their involvement with each other to the point of being intimate. Several of my other "Lesbian" stories might help as well in giving you a few pointers. As JJ said, character development is key to an on going story, but don't get trapped there and forget the seduction. An equal mix works best to captivate the reader and keep them reading. Hope this helps as well. Lance

 

[klvyoenne]

Thank you

Thank you to all who've taken time to read and comment (publicly and privately) on the stories, especially "Learning the Dance." I appreciate it very much.

Klvyoene

 

[junny25]

If the story grasping that would be desirable still