Erotic Impotence

[lostandfounder]

Does anybody else have a hell of a time writing a good erotic poem? Most of the time all my stuff ends up sounding either horribly cliché or like a dirty limerick. (Not that I have anything against a good limerick, it's just usually not what I 'm going for.)

Since this is an erotica based website I want to add something more in that vein and find myself at the end of my... ahem, rope.

Please, somebody let me know I'm not alone or at least throw me some advice!

 

[Randi Grail]

The most erotic poems I've read here on lit has only vaugely been about sex. As soon as you start mentioning cocks and cunts and what those do together it's very easy to get tacky. I've written maybe ten erotic poems for Lit. I have only posted one (edit: two now) of them, the other ones crossed the line into really bad porno.

 

[tarablackwood22]

I think the 'naughty words' have to be handled delicately.

If it's done with poetic purity, I think a poem that may look pornographic on the surface can be wonderful art.

A perfect example of great, great erotic poetry that on surface glance might appear to have crossed the line is Seattle Rain's Just .............but most of the poetry posted here by less skilled hands looks like nothing more than sidewalk scribblings.


the ghosts of daddy's pool hall - new poem......please read!

 

[Barushko]

Just starting to read the poetry here but

smoke
caucusing in audience at overhead lamps

"round" overhead lamps?

no matter - a particularly arresting couplet Miss Blackwood

I have heard of these rooms

I have also read the poem by SeattleRain and concur wth your judgement.

Barush

(who's been behind the eight ball a time or two)

 

[SeattleRain]

I think the 'naughty words' have to be handled delicately.

If it's done with poetic purity, I think a poem that may look pornographic on the surface can be wonderful art.

A perfect example of great, great erotic poetry that on surface glance might appear to have crossed the line is Seattle Rain's Just .............but most of the poetry posted here by less skilled hands looks like nothing more than sidewalk scribblings.

Thank you Tara! I have actually edited that one several times gotta submit the edit (I never submit the edit and I guess I should)

I changed "not a poet, just a prostitute to just a whore"
and It is just cumming to It is just sex...


Yadda yadda and a few others

Damn I wrote that out so fast. I am glad you liked it and humbled that you mentioned it with all of the great ones to choose from.


Okay to answer your question in my humble opinion:

the first thing you need is passion. not just for sex but for life.
Try to fall in love with everything.

think abuot what brings you passion. perhaps go to this place in your mind, in your imagination, and somehow use it intertwined with sexual images. I find the sexiest poems are not really about sex, but have sensuous images in them.

I find the best way to bring out my passion is to write letters to friends, in writing to someone I love, my passion comes out without invitation.

Think about those times in your day that you are for some reason aroused.... what did it for you? What was the reason? Was it always the sexy waitress or was it a front end loader digging into naked dirt? Was it a young woman tracing the cover of a book while waiting to check it out at the library? Not the woman, but the tracing itself?

What does it for you. For YOU as an individual, not just a insert tab A into slot B wiggle around thrust and yadda we all know how to fuck and do not really need instructions from people who are not our lovers, you know?

Um one more thing, how pick an unobtainable woman that you are attracted to.... how will you communicate that you are a great lover without mentioning sex? What are other ways to say it.... think of sexy images that are not really SEXy.

okay I am giong to to take my advice. I love when people ask this stuff, it makes me think more about why I like what I like.

There are some great erotic poems out there to browse through. You might want to go to the erotic poem section, look for names you might recognize and check out what you can find. The only thing, some of the sexiest poems I have ever read have been labled non-erotic.

That is my two cents. You can leave it in one of those have a penny leave a penny cups at the ice cream store.

~SR

 

[SeattleRain]

a few good erotic ones

Okay I went to look for some good erotic stuff for you to read, but I could not remember the damn titles, so I started at A and then started counting by 5, damn there are a lot of erotic poems out there.

These are not meant to be the best from these writers (unless they are) I have not touched upon the majority of the bestest poets or poems, this is random

It was fun.

most are kind of older.

as I wanted to read some stuff I never read before okay the first one is really new but I can't help it, it was an A and I remembered it:

Seattle

A Certain Kind of Magic
by flyguy69 © A Certain Kind of Magic


A full coffee cup
by neonurotic ©


Athletic Discipline
by RisiaSkye ©


atop your bed
by oxalis ©



authors
by Liar ©

By Your Alter
by Icingsugar ©


I Dreamed I Was Her Zipper
by jthserra ©


I'm a Good Book
by WickedEve ©

 

[Guest]

This is a good question.

Most of my writing is erotic. There are different levels of eroticism, it depends on what aspect of sex you wish to convey. The most erotic poems I've written have been subtle writes with vaugue words that make indirect sexy images. The harder words and direct images are usually mixed with light hearted or dark humor. Funnily enough, I tend to receive E's from the WebMistress when I'm poking fun at myself in my jag-off writes.

Just expirement with your erotic poems, don't try to get a rise out of everyone because you won't be able to do it, as everyone has different tastes. Practice by choosing a scene, tune it in and focus on a single image. First write a subtle sexy version then a hardcore one and see what you prefer afterwards. Try adding humor too because good sex is fun sex, so why not let that reflect in your writing?


- neo

 

[champagne1982]

Erotic is as erotic does...

This was written as part of the Just another erotic woowoo challenge -Why Mormons Don't Dance.

There's also a short series (of which I didn't post the last of the 3) involving a Salome-type seduction: Ulalations and Undulations, Adoration and Salivation and finally,

Revelations and Exploitations

Baby, draw down your tongue,
Over glistening mounds
Of pearly flesh
And potent pink
Crests.

You watch them shake,
As your touch
In sweet suspense them make
Shiver and anticipate
The wet wonder of your
Kiss

Exaltant passion
Reaping ripe delights.
A vision of juicy
Succulence as you explore
Lower.

Lower
Nuzzle there
Use the sight of life's gate
To call your need.
Baby, draw down your tongue.

I just wrote a passion poem on the suddenly thread today, maybe you'll find something erotic in that. There are so many things that appeal to people as sensual. Perhaps that should be the title of the category. Sensual Poems. I like the sound of that far better than Erotic Poetry.

To each their own, I guess.

P.S. Neo, you don't get a rise outta me, but the other people in the house wanna know why the computer desk chair is so damp and smelling of musk.

 

[lostandfounder]

Hmmm....

Thanks to everybody who threw their two cents cents into the ring. All of your comments, poems, advice, and understanding is so very greatly appreciated. I've read through all the poems you've pointed me to...oh wow...some of it is sooooo sensual....Sigh....takes my breath away.

You are all right of course, some of the best, most erotic poems are in the non-erotic catagory just because they don't use some of those seven dirty words, but that doesn't make them any less arousing.

Thank you very much SeattleRain
"Was it a young woman tracing the cover of a book while waiting to check it out at the library?"
I can't get that image out of my head now.

You've all given me a lot to think about. Thank you so much. You guys are really great, I mean it. Please, if anyone has anything more to add on the subject, negative, positive, whatever, do so.

lostandfounder

P.S. Tara, "The Ghosts of Daddy's Pool Hall"...I said it before and I'll say it again. It's perfect...A person could write an entire novel based on what you wrote. Thank you.

 

[tarablackwood22]

Re: Hmmm....

P.S. Tara, "The Ghosts of Daddy's Pool Hall"...I said it before and I'll say it again. It's perfect...A person could write an entire novel based on what you wrote. Thank you.

Tara


the wails of witch hazel -new poem.....please read.

leaning on cars and fences -new poem.....please read.

 

[Guest]

I think Eleanora Day is a fine erotic poetess.

 

[The_Fool]

Writing erotic poetry comes easy....It's the "good" part I'm still working on......



Sometimes you can be too indirect, as I was in

The Carpenter .



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