Embrace of Eve

[discipleofeternity]

I'm creating a story heavily inspired by the Biblical tale of Adam and Eve. It will be based on my own take on that story, but that is not the central plot.

With the setting in the modern era, the gist of the plot is that Eve, an ancient, immortal member of a long-forgotten godlike race whom humanity originally descended from, breaks free from her prison and is trying to convert the whole of womankind into a lesbianism.

Caught in the middle of this plot is a seemingly unassuming college student named Kala, who is the target for a special plan of Eve's. Seduced and apparently corrupted for the worse, Kala relishes her new life as part of Eve's budding new-world order. But inner turmoil boils within Kala as she must choose between either fully committing to Eve's vision, or the future of humanity, particularly since her family is caught up in the resistance against Eve's forces.

The big themes of this story include sin and salvation/redemption. I liken it to be a coming of age story in which darkness is restored to light or something like that. Mind you all, this will be an erotica story involving lesbian sex.

Below is a three paragraph sample of my story. Critiques are especially helpful!
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Many eons ago on planet Earth, there existed a transcendent species calling themselves “progenitors” whom lived in blissful paradise. They were mighty beyond reckoning and utterly immortal, possessing shimmering angelic forms that offered just a visual taste of their celestial birthright. The progenitors were created in the image of their creator, a god who was a survivor of a great war. The god had sired his children since he sensed his own death in the near future and needed to preserve his legacy for the sake of the greater good, though when that tragic fate would befall himself could not be deciphered.

Among his many blessings, the god granted the progenitors the gift of free will as he believed their destiny was ultimately theirs to choose. Whether they committed good, evil, or shades of grey in between, the salvation of existence would eventually follow. To deny them their fates of their own would be a grave injustice, one the god knew his enemies would manipulate for their own nefarious ends.

The power of free will would be tested during one fateful day when two adventurous progenitors, Adam and Eve, happened to come across the most breathtaking garden they had ever witnessed. The garden lay on a section of the world their kind had never explored before…or land that perhaps had not been there at all in the first place. There was something amiss about the garden’s sheer majesty that Adam and Eve sensed was deceptive and artificial. Still, they brushed off these misgivings and treaded inwards deep within the garden, curious as to whatever mysteries lay in store for them.

 

[Hypoxia]

Tangent -- an interpretation of the Eden story.

Lord {JHWH} created Man (Adam) and Woman (Eve) somehow -- accounts differ (Gen.1 vs Gen.2). Lord {JHWH} created everything around Man and Woman -- all plants, animals, landscapes, weather, everything. It's all divine product.

Lord {JHWH} was/is too awesome for human eyes, so always communicates via angels (messengers) or burning bushes or whatever. Any divine orders came via intermediaries. Genesis doesn't detail whether angel messengers looked humanoid or bestial or what.

Point is, everything Man and Woman encountered in their existence was a creation of their creator. So the serpent hops up and says, "Change of rules. It's OK now to eat from that tree." ('Serpent' then meant reptile; could have been a talking lizard.) Maybe most previous angels were also talking reptiles. As far as Man and Woman could tell, this was just another Word From On High.

So they went for it. And the trickster Lord {JHWH} used that as an excuse to expel them from Paradise (Persian for walled garden) to make their way through the cruel world. Yes, it was all a trick. Man and Woman had no bad intentions but the got the shaft. Welcome to reality, where your deities fuck with you.

Anyway, maybe work that interpretation into your story. The sin was trickery, not temptation. But maybe the trickery was necessary to force them into the greater world.

 

[Carnevil9]

Regular Adam, regular Eve, regular Garden of Eden. The only difference is, there is no Tree of Knowledge. Instead, the "forbidden fruit" that they are instructed to avoid at all costs is Eve's butthole. They are told in no uncertain terms: "you can fuck all you want in the front hole, but absolutely no anal."

They probably never would have even thought of it, but now that the idea is in their heads, they can think of nothing more wonderful than to experience the forbidden joys of anal nookie. All the pussy fucking and oral in the world can no longer satisfy them.

Pretty soon, Adam's cock develops a face (probably with a forked tongue) and starts talking to him. "C'mon, you know you want to! C'mon, one little buttfuck isn't going to hurt anyone. Go for it!" And we all know where it goes from there......