Einstein and United Pilots loved them; Why not Lit?

[Softly]

It seems that LIterotica readers have little interest in my two stories; "Watch Out, United," and "Einstein: Breast, Vagina, Penis."

My husband, once an airline Captain, helped me write "Watch Out". He sent copies of it to several of his pilot friends, but did not tell them who wrote it. All liked it very much.

A senior United Captain wrote back saying that it brought tears to his eyes. It is now posted on the pilots bulletin board in the pilot lounge at O'Hare under the caption; "We are in trouble!"

My question to you is; is it too much of a pilots story, or is the reference to certain people the reason that it is getting so little responce?

While we are at it. I wrote the story; "Einstein: Breast, Vagina, Penis." I received a long, closly reasoned, e-mail from a professor at Princeton University. He explained that he had been a student of professor Einstein. Loved the man. Felt that Einstein would have loved my story. He had sent copies to several of his colleagues.

Just got average marks on Lit. Why?

[Edited by Softly on 01-26-2001 at 09:28 AM]

 

[cam31camm]

Softly.....your wit kills, and it kills by striking at exactly the hot throbbing open flesh wound of the kind of writing favored here. Einstein was excellent, but something I would have looked for at salon.com, not here.

In defense of this place, though, and the style of writing it evokes, a couple thoughts....first, people are drawn into this site by the chance to read erotic stories, and probably stay for much more than that, but the initial draw is enough. And the proliferation of stories indicates people enjoy writing and reading in this style....second, outlets like this didn't exist just a few years ago....let people develop styles and tastes and the good witty sexy stuff will rise to the top....

not to say i don't like the silly stuff too........

write more and maybe your voice will find your readers...

 

[Ray Dario]

Silliness

Softly, while both of these silly stories were well written, neither appealed to me. I suppose it is because when I come to this site, that is not what I'm looking for.

I declined to vote on those two stories for that very reason. My personal preferences should not be used to downgrade good writing. If I could grade you solely on writing skill, I would give you high marks, but when I vote I like to take the combination of writing skill, subject matter, plot, story line, and character development into account.

I will tell you this. You have a very good sense of humor and are excellent at crafting puns.

I hope that this feedback will help.

Ray

 

[Softly]

Thank you, Cam31Camm, and Ray Dario.

Thank you for taking the time to read the stories, and
write your reactions.

You are right on the money, I'm afraid, with your opinions
about why these two stories are dead in the water.

Deborah is the Queen of the "Humor" stories. I will have to read some of her stories to see what the readers like.

Thanks again.