Editor wanted for story fragment

[An Awful Cad]

Hi all. I'd appreciate some comments on a story I'm currently writing. It's what will eventually probably be the first chapter of 3 or 4 - about 1300 words right now.

To be more clear about what I'd like, I originally started this story as an exercise: to see if I could write a story in one sitting. I failed miserably, as you can see by the fact that I only have a third or less of the story available for editing, but I was left with an interesting fragment. It has a new style that is different from my usual voice, and I'm interested in exploring it further, but would appreciate the guidance of an editor who might help me understand how it sounds to the reader and develop the style a bit more.

Plus I'm procrastinating from writing the rest...

Any volunteers?
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[LadyCibelle]

Hi all. I'd appreciate some comments on a story I'm currently writing. It's what will eventually probably be the first chapter of 3 or 4 - about 1300 words right now.

To be more clear about what I'd like, I originally started this story as an exercise: to see if I could write a story in one sitting. I failed miserably, as you can see by the fact that I only have a third or less of the story available for editing, but I was left with an interesting fragment. It has a new style that is different from my usual voice, and I'm interested in exploring it further, but would appreciate the guidance of an editor who might help me understand how it sounds to the reader and develop the style a bit more.

Plus I'm procrastinating from writing the rest...

Any volunteers?
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I'm overworked right now or I would take you on. I'm sure someone will answer but just in case nobody doesn't....let me know and I'll see what I can do.

Good luck.

 

[J.Q. Hack]

I enjoyed your stories you've written so far. I'm a volunteer editor and would be happy to edit your story. If you'd like my help just PM me and I'll be sure to respond.

J.Q. Hack